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Lady In White
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0 posted 2004-01-21 09:43 AM



The Stay

I would come to you
Again, though
I have lost my way

I would find my love
In you, again,
Come the end of day.

Except time has rent us
Duly severed
Love was lost in one’s
Stone never
Forgiveness lies not
Within your heart
Not all endings begin
A new start

I would live
To cross that bridge, but

All I see is moat.

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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2004-01-21 09:48 AM


"Except time has rent us
Duly severed
Love was lost in one’s
Stone never
Forgiveness lies not
Within your heart
Not all endings begin
A new start"

Those lines are my favorite...and the entire piece was wonderful!

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

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2 posted 2004-01-21 09:54 AM


Hello my dear Lady. Lovely words once again. Thankyou for this. hugs, Chris
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3 posted 2004-01-21 09:56 AM


very nicely done.. a sense of archaic language and style but with a subtle delivery which does not set the time.. nor set the readers mind entirely into expecting a "perfect" rendering of language or image to one time period.


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4 posted 2004-01-21 10:07 AM


"Not all endings begin
A new start

I would live
To cross that bridge, but

All I see is moat."

i feel for you...cause i feel this too!

but as always a beautiful flow of words...

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5 posted 2004-01-21 10:15 AM


enjoyed
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6 posted 2004-01-21 11:11 AM


Wonderful write to ponder here today dear Lady.
You have been missed and it is good to read you once again.
Hugs~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

Terrina
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7 posted 2004-01-21 11:15 AM


Forgiveness lies not
Within your heart
Not all endings begin
A new start

I love this.
Thank you for sharing

passing shadows
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8 posted 2004-01-21 01:10 PM


yep...I could not have said it better
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9 posted 2004-01-21 01:33 PM


you have been gone from us to long
and your words...so very true.
I gotta agree with Dixie here...

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10 posted 2004-01-21 01:42 PM


Not all endings begin
A new start

I would live
To cross that bridge,
=======================

ahhh lady this is a bittersweet beauty.
delicate, elegant and graceful as your words always are.

How foolish must man be, not to be impressed by mountains and trees
not to be brought to his knees by the beauty of the sky and sea

Cherokee Lore

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11 posted 2004-01-21 04:11 PM


hmmmmm - I like moats because they are suitable nesting spots for Toerag - lol
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12 posted 2004-01-21 05:42 PM


"Except time has rent us
Duly severed
Love was lost in one’s
Stone never
Forgiveness lies not
Within your heart
Not all endings begin
A new start

I would live
To cross that bridge, but

All I see is moat."

It has been too long but this was worth the wait!!  Impressive write Lady...

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