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GG
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0 posted 01-20-2004 02:51 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for GG


Somebodies love song
Was lost in the wind,
Caught in the trees,
And faded,
By dim
Tints
Of
M
o
o
n
l
i
g
h
t
.


He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.


[This message has been edited by GG (01-20-2004 03:31 PM).]

© Copyright 2004 GG - All Rights Reserved
muted
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1 posted 01-20-2004 03:05 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

love this!
love this!
.....did i mention i loved this!

beautiful little gem of a poem!
passing shadows
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2 posted 01-20-2004 03:06 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

great piece...you know what I thought when I looked at it though...?

it would be cool to see moonlight done like this...like a tail of a kite...whatyathink?

m
o
o
n
l
i
g
h
t
iliana
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3 posted 01-20-2004 03:21 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

GG -- this was a marvel!    hugs....jo
GG
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4 posted 01-20-2004 03:35 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

muted,
lol so do you love it? I'm honored! Thank you much

Dix,
you're a genious! I'm gonna change it loveya

iliana,
thank you! I'm glad you think so

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Kristin Eve
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5 posted 01-20-2004 04:05 AM       View Profile for Kristin Eve   Email Kristin Eve   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kristin Eve

i disagree...

I think the direction of this poem is PERFECT as it is... and i LOVE it.

Beautiful beautiful work!

"By the time you finish reading this...
You will have finished readding this"

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6 posted 01-20-2004 04:09 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

either way was great! I just had a vision and wanted to share it...I love it both ways!

awesome stuff! I love you too, girl
Kristin Eve
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7 posted 01-20-2004 04:14 AM       View Profile for Kristin Eve   Email Kristin Eve   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kristin Eve

oh. i guess i should exlplain WHY i like it... hehe...

It reminds me of a large funnel.
Like the song was once so
arduous and amplified...
but slowly,
as the melody went unheard,
each passing note
broke alone
and independantly
fell
to
the
ground
in sounds of
sighs
instead of
thunderous, passionate song.

i think it's absolutely exquisite just the way it is.

"By the time you finish reading this...
You will have finished readding this"

GG
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8 posted 01-20-2004 04:26 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Kirstin,
the way it is now is from the what Dix said, before I just had moonlight on one line. I liked her idea too... I'm glad you like it! Thanks for both replies!

Dix,
glad you did thank you...

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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9 posted 01-20-2004 06:39 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

Beautiful!!

enjoyed it very, very much

Charisma
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10 posted 01-20-2004 09:46 AM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Great job with this, very enjoyable read for this morning, thank you

Brian

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11 posted 01-20-2004 11:08 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

OhAlyssa~
Not only are the word-thoughts totally creative ... the 'suggested' formatting is IMPRESSIVE as well~

That little DixieDoodle has an eye for style, doesn't she ?

This is one CLASSY PIECE~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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GG
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12 posted 01-21-2004 12:05 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Charisma,
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it and replied...

Brian,
thank you sir! good morning, or uh evening now, to you. Glad you liked it.

Marge,
she sure does! Thanks for your kind reply, you're always so sweet.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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13 posted 02-06-2004 04:23 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

GG,
   This was excellent by one and tremendous by two.  I liked the way you and Dixie played with this!   Either way, it is great!
Take care...
             Sadie
GG
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14 posted 02-07-2004 01:50 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Cathy,
aww wow I didn't expect to see this back up again. Thank you so much for the reply! Take care...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

 
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