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Ratleader
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0 posted 2004-01-19 01:06 AM


A Pause For Reflection During
Participation In The Stylized
And Failsafe Exercise Of A Skill
Once Needed For Survival


Nonetheless, I use the right proportions
so it won’t fail or smother out;
start with tinder and a little kindling,
then the larger pieces and the logs.

Still, I won’t pretend that it’s because
I can’t turn on the gas.

I can hunt – with a pistol if I needed to,
even a bow – and I’ve played
the sports of run jump throw,
been accepted by some tribes,
though always as the friendly loner
on the edge of things.

And tonight I’ll push the chill away
because I like the feel of doing it.

This gives me ownership,
the notion I'm controlling things,
sufficient unto the day,
the master of cold and dark.

I’ve killed and I’ve defended,
even fought what sense would say
were pagan gods and won.
It’s not about those things at all,
at least not any more.

I won’t abide this pretense in myself.
I live in town and I’m building a fire.
When it gets dark I’ll turn on the lights.

Disgusted, I reach for the gas valve.

© Copyright 2004 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
Foxyoasis
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1 posted 2004-01-19 01:52 AM


great write

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


iliana
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2 posted 2004-01-19 01:52 AM


Ratleader -- I am pondering this one; it leaves so much to the imagination; then again, it could be very straight forward.  A puzzle you've written to intrigue me tonight.  I hope tomorrow will be bright.   hugs........jo (a fan)

Back a second time....totally engrossed in this wonderful writing.  My mind keeps going back to career changes and jobs I've had over the years.  This is how the poem relates to me!  If I am way off, please let me know.  

[This message has been edited by iliana (01-19-2004 02:42 AM).]

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3 posted 2004-01-19 04:07 AM


powerful read

very intense

Ericc
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4 posted 2004-01-19 07:57 AM


Wow Ed...!!!!


Eric

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5 posted 2004-01-19 09:06 AM


(smiling)..
Ed... the insight and perspective well noted on this end. I enjoyed

Martie
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6 posted 2004-01-19 09:49 AM


Ed

with my fireplace, even though it has a gas valve, I still have to build the burning material just right to get it to flame, and it's almost the same.  

"I won’t abide this pretense in myself.
I live in town and I’m building a fire.
When it gets dark I’ll turn on the lights."

I will too, it would be foolish not to.  Hugs!

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2004-01-19 10:01 AM


Ratleader
I understand where you're comming from. The metaphor is well done and I enjoyed the read.

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8 posted 2004-01-19 10:18 AM


Ratleader,
   I can very well relate to this one, as all of yours.  There's something inspiring that comes about when you know you can survive the elements...  You're write brought many images to mind.  Thank you, RatL.

  BTW, grea title!                    
   ~Sadelite~
                        

BluesSerenade
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9 posted 2004-01-19 11:24 AM


And tonight I’ll push the chill away
because I like the feel of doing it.

Interesting what suits our mood at the time,
and how we choose to combat it.  

Oh baby I love your ways, and I can so relate!

Good stuff, Ed~

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10 posted 2004-01-19 04:10 PM


I enjoyed this so much, my friend... no pretense here, just excellence. *S*
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11 posted 2004-01-19 11:26 PM


I enjoyed this very much, and it made me laugh. About an hour ago, I was cutting a leather slip to sew into a shooting bag to hold a flint and steel tinder box.  It is a nice box with a burning lens fitted into the lid just in case I get fumble fingered with my striker.


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