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Abe
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since 2003-05-28
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0 posted 2004-01-17 05:08 PM


TIMELESS

The realization of the moment
Makes it’s stand, still and quiet
Kind of a dream held in limbo
In the lonely dark of night.

Knowing there could be no more
Or at the most, even any less
In that moment just flashed past
So fast, I couldn’t even guess.

Through all time, thought about
But, not with much conviction
Knowing, someday it would come
The finality, of one last, eviction.

When you look straight in the eyes
That aren’t looking back at you
Seems you get some "x-ray vision"
That lets you see it, and right, through.

All those things that must be done
That won’t even go into the time
Noticing things that wouldn’t fit
Now, seem to fit in, just fine.

Sand running through the hourglass
All has a place to land, somewhere
And when that last grain stops falling
I know I’ll know, when I get there.

Del "Abe" Jones

© Copyright 2004 Del - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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1 posted 2004-01-17 06:01 PM


This soul enjoyed your very nicely written observation on the value of time.  Thanks you also.
DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-01-17 06:25 PM


It is almost a lazy style
Talking through a vision

Only criticism from me is that you are loosing readers at the beginning of a line with the meaning of the previous line failing to move them and move them

I liked it but I love to see you make it really electric

regards

Dave

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3 posted 2004-01-17 07:07 PM




(smiles) You are timeless just as we all have that essence in us, in our living faith, and its voice, that speaks of dearest quality! (angel hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Abe, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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