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J.Samm
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0 posted 2004-01-16 09:42 PM


Venom

You slithered your way into my heart
Stung it with your most potent venom
You intoxicated my veins with your passion
Poisoned my soul with your zeal
My mind became so immune to irrationality
That even logic could not dissect nor comprehend
The premise that you are beneath me
And the conclusion that you have conquered me.

© Copyright 2004 Jasmine Sagge - All Rights Reserved
Copperbell
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1 posted 2004-01-16 09:46 PM


interesting...the premise that you are beneath me, and the conclusion that you conquered me.  
devina
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2 posted 2004-01-16 09:51 PM


Healthy thought process here...welcome to the forums!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



J.Samm
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3 posted 2004-01-16 10:06 PM


thank you very much, devina and copperbell! i am very happy and honored to be part of this forum. i am also looking forward to read your poetry.
iliana
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4 posted 2004-01-16 10:13 PM


Welcome to PIP.  This was a great first posting.  I am impressed with your analogy!  Hopefully, this venom was not the kind which has no antidote!
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5 posted 2004-01-16 10:39 PM





Enjoyed your first post !!

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6 posted 2004-01-17 05:10 PM






(big angel hugs) This is a sad but excellent debut, sweet friend, I send angel antidote healing hugs your way and may the remedy soon be the only herb swimming in your bloodstream, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet Jasmine, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jasmine, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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7 posted 2004-01-21 09:11 PM


J.Samm, a belated Welcome to Passions.  This, is a very intense write.  What was your inspiration?  How did you come to write of the venom of a bad situation so very, very well?

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

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8 posted 2004-01-21 09:38 PM


Jasmine~
Fantastic entry !!
Welcome to PiP~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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wickedbeautifulpoetry
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9 posted 2004-01-21 10:25 PM


Nice job, J.Samm!
Looking forward to reading more of your work. Great first post!
-Katie-

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10 posted 2004-01-21 10:39 PM


This is a great piece!!!!  I very much enjoyed this!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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11 posted 2004-01-21 10:39 PM


Hi, and Welcome to Passions we are glad you have joined our circle of friends, and family….
a little late with the welcoming.....hope you enjoy your time here...

please check your email for a special greeting


Kindly

Greeneyes~

~*~
In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes art

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