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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-01-14 07:12 PM



mime me a dream

sliver slices
    serrated thoughts
knife me
through the doughy
foundation

shadow dweller
sand shaped gilder
silver refractor of
your soul

moon_me_mad
   lily - coat - my
eyes
the color of yours

so that your empty
is mine
  mime me a dream
through this half full
half drained
day


©snow'04

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda


© Copyright 2004 Snow - All Rights Reserved
marcel
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az, usa
1 posted 2004-01-14 08:09 PM


beautifully crafted word play, left me wanting more.......
Ravenwolfvoyager
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since 2003-12-25
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2 posted 2004-01-14 08:11 PM


You pour much depth into your writes, each as enjoyable as the first. Thank you again for the share and I look forward to reading the many more.  
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
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3 posted 2004-01-15 12:55 PM


snow,

what a really cool read.  this one is one of those you read over and over just to let it really speak to you.  very nicely done.  loved it.

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2004-01-15 03:56 AM


very cool!
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