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Sunshine
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0 posted 2004-01-14 01:53 PM



Your Poem

It is your hand
that bleeds me life,
your sounds expanding lungs,
your brush, your paint,
your words of hurt
lined in brine

and this is how
I am born.

You write of joys sugar-plumed
from memory’s grasp,
then turning a lane,
bring shadows of light
to meet dark revelations,
and your pen inks them
in blackest gloom.

You are the diver
reaching depths
that even whales will not go
and here, now
one would find you
still reaching
to touch a
center.

You are the moth
to flame,
a lady in search of her knight,
a tribute
in search of a goddess.

I am your poem.

I am the lady spun from silk
and rags

the gentle man soured and
bent, grateful for life

I am the child that
Heaven sent

Whose laughter
only fairies may hear

Where imagination is a flight
into regions yet explored,

and I am war, starvation, greed
and avarice, horrid tales that
leave hearts torn.

I am the conscious,
subconscious,
and at times,
the unforgiving.

I am love,
a dream worth living.

I am craft carved by your quill,
a mind in solemn bent, and still.

I am your poem,
An ode penned from deep your vessel

And you are responsible in
turning me into sound or Braille,
to leave me fly or keep me railed
allowing me to tenderly touch
or gash the thought of men
just do not be such to Muse
that you give her no ken.

I am yours,
but won’t be owned.

I am yours,
a swift atone.

You, the poet ~
Me, your poem.


~*~


©Karilea Rilling Jungel
26 November 2002

© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2004-01-14 01:55 PM


This is wonderful Karilea!!

Loved the last lines...

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

McLean
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2 posted 2004-01-14 01:58 PM


I am the conscious,
subconscious,
and at times,
the unforgiving.

Yes, do I like this.  This is like a tribute to a wonderful, healing craft, that brings so many things.  I get much laughter from Toerag, Long John Silver and Balladeer.  I get so much compassion from many of those who have experienced amazing illnesses, recoveries, from those who have mourned deaths and such.  I get a deeper understanding or another definition of spirituality from some.  

This is a beautiful song for a wonderful thing, my dear.

Just lovely.

McLean

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3 posted 2004-01-14 02:05 PM


"I am the child that
Heaven sent

Whose laughter
only fairies may hear"

and this....

"I am yours,
but won’t be owned.

I am yours,
a swift atone.

You, the poet ~
Me, your poem."


This I am keeping!!  
This I need to read each and every day...
For this...is pure inspire!
~Heart Hugs~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2004-01-14 02:19 PM


Im keepin this...and you...*wink*
oh...I was just reminding someone the other day about the words of one of my fav songs
"after the fire, after all the pain...
I will be the flame..."

now how did you know...
come to think of it, don't answer that!

garysgirl
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5 posted 2004-01-14 02:43 PM


I am yours,
but won’t be owned.

I am yours,
a swift atone.

You, the poet ~
Me, your poem.


Beautiful, beautiful poem, Karilea....
and I'm keeping it, too.
Hugs  
Ethel


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6 posted 2004-01-14 03:02 PM


There aren't many times when I'm left speechless... but this is one. *S* Can you hear the applause? It's yours.
ice
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7 posted 2004-01-14 03:10 PM


excellent.....loud applause....
______ice
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8 posted 2004-01-14 03:26 PM


Keepin' this treasure dear lady! hugs, Chris

"When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You know
that your name is safe in their mouth." Billy - age 4



    

inkedgoddess
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9 posted 2004-01-14 04:22 PM


Yes we are all that and more through our poetry and yours, dear lady of infinite wisdom
Kaoru
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10 posted 2004-01-14 04:29 PM


This is brilliance at it's best.
Margherita
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11 posted 2004-01-14 04:48 PM


Yes, it's all this and you captured it beautifully, dear Karilea.
Love and hugs. Margherita

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12 posted 2004-01-14 06:41 PM


Wow Karilea, I can't choose one favourite line, I loved every single one. This is magnificent.

Keeping it.

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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13 posted 2004-01-14 06:49 PM


A remarkable write Sunshine, it is mesmerizing and a joy to read. You have your soul written all over this. This is truly a poets poem and a poem for the poet. Wonderful.  
kaile
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14 posted 2004-01-17 12:22 PM


I am yours,
but won’t be owned

Precisely! i dig these two lines very much--so relatable

Paul Wilson
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15 posted 2004-01-17 12:30 PM


Karilea...Beautiful words. Reminds me of the Neil Diamond song " I Am " Thanks for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

ThisDiamond
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16 posted 2004-01-17 01:00 PM


Standing ovation my dear!

You are so in tune with this music. TD

iliana
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17 posted 2004-01-17 01:04 PM


Sunshine -- this was soooooo good.  I was so deeply moved by this one and saw in it a true reflection of what I read here at Passions everyday.  Your Poem has captured the essense of this website!
passing shadows
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18 posted 2004-01-17 01:13 PM


excellent! thank you and...thank you
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19 posted 2004-01-17 01:23 PM


Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Stunning and wonderful and a keeper for all times.

Huggles Karilea ... Marti

I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel
more like I transcribe them. It's just a matter of listening.


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20 posted 2004-01-17 01:52 PM


Wow!

...

Wow!


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21 posted 2004-01-17 01:58 PM


Karilea~
My but this is lovely~

'I am the child that
Heaven sent

Whose laughter
only fairies may hear'


My favorite sliver that sends a shiver~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

[email]noles1@totcon.com

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22 posted 2004-01-17 03:49 PM




(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, you are as eal as a poet can be and it is all these precious emotions that characterize the dear poetess! (big angel hugs) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Martie
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23 posted 2004-01-17 07:54 PM


Karilea...This is fabulous!  
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