Color Of Cold ( Inspired and with thanks to Enchantress for use of her words)

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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2004-01-14 01:12 PM

It is cold

and they are naked

but the trees
catch snow

in their hands.
( Copyright: Enchantress)

Such days as these
You stand bare and I
Shiver with this anticipated change
In climate

Knowing the hands I use
Will brush away
Trembled cold

Then warm your limbs
though
Shadows seem stark
On winter’s snow
That fell through trees

Come,
We will ignore their marks
And as one
Match the sun for shades
Of this the color
That rises in flush
On cheek

Bared
Our hands
Touch

Kaoru

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1 posted 2004-01-14 01:14 PM

Cpat, this is absolutely beautiful.

Nightshade

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just out of reach

2 posted 2004-01-14 01:15 PM

Cpat, this is lovely beyond lovely!!
My sister was certainly a great inspire for you. Awesome. hugs, Chris

"When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You know
that your name is safe in their mouth." Billy - age 4

Cpat Hair

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3 posted 2004-01-14 01:19 PM

Meg.. thank you ma'am.. glad you liked..

Nightshade.. the words your sister wrote indeed started me down three paths of adding to them or using them.. her imagery was strong and it painted a mood as well as a picture.. the one I posted, was perhaps the least intimate of the directions... but perhaps the most universal as well..

my thanks to you both..and to nancy for allowing me to play with her words...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-01-14 01:22 PM

Wonderful Captain...
I am so honoured to have inspired this beautiful write.
Hugs~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-01-14 01:24 PM

Oops..forgot to click the save box.

Sunshine

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6 posted 2004-01-14 01:33 PM

There's been a whole lot of inspire lately...but I'm hard put to say that this doesn't top 'em.

McLean
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7 posted 2004-01-14 01:34 PM

I think this is quite sensual...let me go read it again to be sure! I like it.

McLean

Cpat Hair

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8 posted 2004-01-14 01:40 PM

thank you Nancy..for the use of the words.
Sunshine.. I doubt it tops any..but your kindness is appreciated
McLean.. glad you enjoyed

and for another version..lol.. one of the inspires was simply to add to her words as this:

It is cold

and they are naked

but the trees
catch snow

in their hands

While I

in reach of mine

feel the cold

of you

Sunshine

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9 posted 2004-01-14 03:47 PM

Hmmm...does for me. Ha!

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

10 posted 2004-01-14 04:01 PM

Mmmmmm..I like the second one as well.
I do have a thing for short ..to the point verses.
That is..unless, it is one of your stories Captain.

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2004-01-14 06:27 PM

Very beautiful Cpat

It's always a pleasure to read you Sir

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

suthern

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12 posted 2004-01-15 04:03 PM

Her poem is beautiful... and so are those she inspired. *S* I like the paths your mind took with this, Cap'n... lovely! *S*

NewEnglandlazurlu
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13 posted 2004-01-15 04:23 PM

Ron ... what a tribute to Enchantress to add words to her piece. And your words are as beautiful as hers.

Huggles, Marti

2writeis2be
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14 posted 2004-01-15 04:39 PM

ooh yes that continuation of the short poem worked well...neato!

iliana
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15 posted 2004-01-15 05:19 PM

Captain -- This was lovely and I really enjoyed reading it.

steavenr
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16 posted 2004-01-15 09:34 PM

beautifully inspired and exquisitely written.

Greeneyes

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17 posted 2004-01-15 09:37 PM

divine inspiration

Martie

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18 posted 2004-01-15 10:57 PM

Ron...A beautiful trip from inspiration to inspired.

muted

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19 posted 2004-01-19 12:00 PM

breathtaking
...wow...

Mysteria

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20 posted 2004-01-19 04:32 PM

Almost my loss - but I found you, and am better for it that's for sure. Wowzers!

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