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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
TWENTY OR LESS…#179 Copyright 2004 by:MARK V SHELDON Indeed my dreams drown in the pools of your eyes and in your beauty my wish lies You CAN make a difference: |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
makes me sigh... :-) nice job Mark Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Morning Mark.. while this is nice.. and sounds great when spoken.. pools of your eyes??? perhaps a more emotiional write for you than some... and the use of that phrase meant to convey admiration more than to be unique iin phrasing and imagery.... lol.. so shoot me bud... I do not care for this one... only because I have seen what you can do normally do with images and short verse... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thanks KristieSue  .Hi Ron. (smirking) Yes, it is cliche on the surface, but you should know of the "trademark dualisms" of mine by now, eh? As always, I leave the half-full, or half-empty up to my readers and reserve the deeper meanings for myself...  Thanks for the honesty, though -- know it is ALWAYS appreciated.-MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL.. the dualism is not lost... and the piece is not inneffective sir.. I know you could have accomplished the same with other images and stayed in the same vein... as always... I enjoy reading your offerings... even if or when I might have personally liked to see the stretch in them which you normally apply to everything you write.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
some folks just have those eyes, don't they? |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Pools aplenty, deep enough to find the fish. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Understood, Ron, and definitely no offense taken. Maybe it's the "normally" and "everything" today that took a vacation...? Stay tuned, though -- there'll be other offerings...  Dixie... they're deeper than the Marianas Trench... (and just as "dangerous"...) Kaoru... or something fishy... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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