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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2004-01-14 08:17 AM


the sun begins to slip
into the silken drape
where the wide sea
embraces the sky
tenderly

perhaps one can find quietude
resting on crimson-tinged waves

~

a family of birds
hastens its flight
homewardly bound
charting course
nestwards

that’s when silent eyes turn moist
measuring lengthening shadows

~

haven't written much lately... but haven't given up... not yet, anyway...

© Copyright 2004 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-01-14 08:20 AM


My friend.. this captures in a not quite way something profound.. not quite spelling out the details and not quite letting the reader see it all.. enticing them to think..and to reflect themselves on the flight of birds and their own silent eyes...

nicely done sir.. I enjoyed

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2004-01-14 08:23 AM


Sudhir,
Good one, enjoyed the read.

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3 posted 2004-01-14 11:22 AM


What a beautiful write! *S* I like this very much. *S*
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4 posted 2004-01-14 11:24 AM


This was good -- I liked the visuals effect it left with me!
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5 posted 2004-01-14 03:38 PM


very well done
Sudhir Iyer
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6 posted 2004-03-05 03:14 PM


thank you all, my dear friends...

regards
sudhir

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