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"Stinkin' Up the Place"
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"Stinkin' Up the Place" |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
The leachate of ones' thoughts distilled from piles of manure, may yet retain a certain "air" that some would deem impure. Though roses it is rumored by all names would smell as sweet, the stench of some of what I write could knock you off your feet! Not everything, now mind you, in all fairness I must say, for sometimes if the wind's just right it blows the other way. A vision of some lush green grass beneath a sky of blue, by-products of a fertile mind composted just for you. But, other times in air becalmed odiferous scents arise, an olfactory bombardment bringing teardrops to the eyes. " What kind of freakin' lunatic could write such bombs?" yuh'd think, " may the good lord please have mercy, Mother Mary, that plumb STINKS!" Well, let me tell you something, while you're left gasping for air, to pungently pontificate, I furthermore declare. " As beauty is beholdin' to the eyes with which it's viewed, if I were you I'd grab my nose and hold on tightly dude!" "Cuz I'm just gettin started at perfectin' this here art, and so the smell of sweet success remains a world apart!" [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (01-13-2004 06:08 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very funny and, oh, so well written. But, then again, I am not a critic! |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Your semantical antics and breadth of language never cease to amaze and delight this reader. This one was a pure pleasure to read aloud, though visually, there was a problem with the 3rd line, 3rd quatrain. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
iliana, Thank you. "All in fun and fun for all", oh wait, I think I just misquoted! Oh well. Doc Alicat, You are much too kind. 3rd line, 3rd stanza corrected. I quote, "semantical antics", this, to me, is a compliment of the highest order. Hope to see you around the "shop". Doc |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Hilarious piece, Doc! Your humor is always a delight! As for your writings, well, I haven't found a stinker yet! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Hark! Oh what scent doth reach thy nose? Tis by Doctor Moose this here rose For it doth smell sweet these fine lines More pungent than a vintage wine With a glass raised in salute. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Denise, Like a breath of fresh air, your comments always seem. Thanks. Doc Drew, Woo-hoo, what's that smell! A little Lynyrd Skynyrd ? Nope, that would just be me stinkin' up the place again. Thanks ol' buddy, haven't been cruisin' the open much of late, I'll be checkin' up on ya though. Doc |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Doc, When I saw your name, I just had to stop in and see what you are up to! Droppping the fertilizer and planting some seed, I see. Should be a good crop next year, but it'd be hard to beat this one! ~Sadelite~ |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 this is sooo cheeky and funny...much enjoyed! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sadelite, Thanks. Me fields, they is fertiled, and me seeds( I doth think ) smell not much like the myrtle, not so pleasing their stink, yet behooves one to mention, when such scents should arise, it might be my intention, to open some eyes. Doc muted, Hey! Keep it down will ya?! Thanks so much, glad you liked. Doc |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
lol |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
passing shadows, Thanks. Doc |
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