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James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-01-13 11:54 AM



I love you

You are life to me, my center and my goal

I love you

When I’m sad, just this thought lightens me

I love you

I have something to live for, a hope, a dream

I love you

The longing is part of me, defines my living

I love you

Your face is a precious thing to me, a treasure

I love you

I wait for our time, but oh I don’t want to wait

I love you

And I want more, more, always more of you

I love you

I fall asleep with you, though we are distant

I love you

You are my first thought of the day, every day

I love you

You excite me; I don’t even ask myself why

I love you

If I could be anywhere, do anything...you...

I love you

I feel your spirit within me, a steady flame

I love you

I can tell you a thousand reasons, and none

I love you

When your heart calls, my heart responds

I love you

I live for the day when we will come true

I love you

Merely describing my love for you brings joy

I love you

Quietly, peacefully, intimately, completely

I love you

I know you and love you, loved before I knew

I love you

And I remember the moment when I realized

I love you

Now and beyond all time that I can imagine

I love you

I can’t form a thought of living without you

I love you

In you I am complete, and wholly incomplete

I love you

And I could go on forever, telling you how

I love you

And I WILL go on forever, telling you how

I love you


© Copyright 2004 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-01-13 11:55 AM


I don't mind seeing this much repetition at all...
and neither will she.  

Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2004-01-13 11:59 AM


lovely, and agreed much with Sunshine, this repetition is perfect!
1slick_lady
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3 posted 2004-01-13 12:27 PM


and it is about darn time you told me too....giggle....h
Pilgrimage
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4 posted 2004-01-13 12:32 PM


I especially like the lines where the 'I love you' is the ending of the sentence begun in the line before it. Nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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5 posted 2004-01-13 12:49 PM


I think I understand what you are trying to say,
but tell me one more time, okay?

neat write here...I'm sure she'll love this!

Enchantress
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6 posted 2004-01-13 01:45 PM


She is going to absolutely love this!!
I know I did!
Hugs~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

suthern
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7 posted 2004-01-13 03:36 PM


Sometimes brevity is a blessing... but this is a poem I didn't want to end. *S* I can't think of a woman alive who wouldn't be both touched to the core and dancing with delight to know this was hers... Your lady is a lucky one indeed! *S*
Beautiful work that shows a beautiful heart... well done, my friend. *S*

Kristin Eve
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8 posted 2004-01-13 04:00 PM


I think this is an excellent use of repetition... and I adore the way it ended...
"i could go on..."
i love you
"i WILL go on.."
i love you.

Its really beautiful. whomever this is about better deserve it!

James_A_Fraser
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9 posted 2004-01-13 05:21 PM


They do, all of 'em.

I should have mentioned that the poem has one line for each...



~~J

James_A_Fraser
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10 posted 2004-01-13 05:22 PM


Now Jamie will die!

No way out of a hole like that!

None!



~~J

suthern
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11 posted 2004-01-14 10:58 AM


ROFLMAO... I came back for another read of romance at its finest and most tender... and find brat extraordinaire has visited! LOL

That's a nice looking hole you've dug there! LOL You give new meaning to work having depth. *G*

*whistling softly under my breath as I make a sexist remark* Now isn't it just like a guy to backpedal like crazy when he realizes he's put his heart on display? LOL

Excellent work, my friend... and hilarious shenanigans. *G*



Martie
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12 posted 2004-01-14 10:58 PM


Jamie

The one this was meant for must believe you...you have so eloquently staited your heart.  

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2004-01-14 11:46 PM


Nice writing...James
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