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EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

0 posted 2004-01-13 11:06 AM

To The Palm of My Hand

There is an awed silence that permeates
everything in the minute hours just
before dawn, a stillness that enshrouds me,
and murmurs quietly within my soul.

It cleaves at my heart, slicing in two what
once was whole. Into this emptiness spills
the remembrance of you. It is dark, chilled,
and bitter, like coffee unremembered.

I close my eyes and shudder before I
swallow deeply from that cup. These are but
yesterdays' phantoms. Why do they haunt me?
The answers are not forthcoming this day.

With shaking hands I pull out my lighter.
My eyes caress it, and even in the
murkiness I can easily discern
the engraving cut into the metal.

These were the words you spoke to me before
the falling apart, before the ending
of all things and dreams. A sigh slips from my
lips. Were they ever more than an etching?

Effortlessly I flip it open as
I draw the next nail for my coffin from
the half empty packet. How you abhorred
this addiction. I can't say I blame you.

However I've already given up
so much. This I will cling to for yet a
while longer. Rocking back and forth I
press your gift close to the palm of my hand.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

1 posted 2004-01-13 11:12 AM

Hello My Friend,
I really like this poem.
Its written beautifully as all your
poems are. You write with a style that
one such as myself wish had.

:-)

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-01-13 11:19 AM

Very well done Kevin.
Fantastic imagery brings this scene to life.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

3 posted 2004-01-13 08:30 PM

EV,

   Hope you haven't tricked me again!  I'm wondering if these are the poet's feelings!
Could almost shed a tear here...  Wonderful write-you grabbed me at the emotion.  Catch you later sometime.
                  Your friend, Sadelite

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-01-13 08:32 PM

"Effortlessly I flip it open as
I draw the next nail for my coffin from
the half empty packet."

The whole write was simply engrossing. I really enjoyed it and, particularly the lines above, and the ending!

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2004-01-13 09:27 PM

Applause...
The high cost of a love lost is never paid in full..All we have to show sometimes for that purchase are tokens, such as your lighter....enjoyed this poem, Kevin
_______ice
><>

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

6 posted 2004-01-14 02:17 AM

small things comfort yet remind us...

I love this poem, and I have missed being here to read your work.

All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-01-14 03:14 AM

gawd! I love it when you get inspired!

UniqueFreak
Member

since 2004-01-09

Posts 62
Scotland

8 posted 2004-01-14 08:24 AM

very special indeed! thanks for sharing!

Stephanie

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2004-01-14 08:31 AM

EvocativeVerse2
Good thoughts, good write, good read.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

10 posted 2004-01-14 01:02 PM

However I've already given up
so much. This I will cling to for yet a
while longer. Rocking back and forth I
press your gift close to the palm of my hand.

Kevin, I sure am glad that I looked on the other page
and found this. this is so sweet and very touching.
Sometimes some of the memories just won't leavem,
will they? That can be good, at times.

Hugs

Ethel

McLean
Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 484
state of marital bliss

11 posted 2004-01-14 01:53 PM

Oh my goodness, this is very moving. I was hanging on every word until the end, knowing what was coming, but needing to savor the words that were taking me there. Very dramatic, dear, and I do cherrish this one, because it's familiar. Except, I don't smoke. I don't usually wake very early, either. And I haven't etched anything to anybody and they haven't etched to me...

I really liked this, especially the particular words "coffee unremembered" (how creative) and the part where you say "another nail for my coffin". Great job!

McLean

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