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Kristin Eve
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since 2004-01-13

Posts 89
On, Canada

0 posted 2004-01-13 01:28 AM

Upon the snow-clad bough, does he,
This little bird, sit quietly,
Swell out his red breast ardently
And gaze upon the world in thought.

“In this wonderland,” he deems,
“Things aren’t always as they seem!
This wintry night is but a dream…
A certainty that pain has taught.”

(Of course it’s pretty in the trees-
Wild porcelain dances gracefully
To fall upon soft, gentle knees
and join the rested snow on ground)

Our little bird does softly tear,
While nosy fauna gather near
To hear the mourning heartbeat clear…
…A curious and labored sound.

(This distress falls aimlessly
On hearts that feel quite painlessly
And the little critters underneath
Don’t understand the bird’s sad cries.)

“I shall depart alone” he frowns,
While snowflakes rest upon his crown
And suddenly the bird does lean
Towards his chosen fate-
The ground.

The eyes of the animals did follow
The great demise of the mourning swallow
Their faces nonchalant and hollow
-Yet ready for the vacant thud.

And then it came, a sound so small
(The sorrow bouncing off them all)
White dust, disturbed, to rise then fall
Atop the small and open tomb.

One small breath escaped the bird,
A grand finally – one final word.
The warm exhale danced up and merged
With winter’s cold and naked air.

Little eyes that know no better
Seek beauty from a single feather,
Waltzing with the wintry weather,
Above their haloed heads.

(A curtain, white and crystalline
Falls perfectly to end the scene,
And none do stay to intervene,
While winter buries death.)

No mourning shakes old Winter’s hand,
And so continues wonderland
For nature cannot understand,
Despair in hearts of little birds.

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2004-01-13 01:30 AM

Hi, and Welcome to Passions. We are glad you have joined our circle of friends, and family….

you will indeed fit in so nicely here....

please check your email for a special greeting

Kindly

Greeneyes~

~*~
In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes art

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

2 posted 2004-01-13 09:47 AM

This is so tender and beautiful...with a great title!

Eric

McLean
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since 2004-01-05

Posts 484
state of marital bliss

3 posted 2004-01-13 09:55 AM

Welcome to the fun place! This is a fabulous first post!

McLean

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2004-01-13 10:03 AM

Welcome to Passions fellow Ontarian !!
Enjoyed your first post!
Chris

"When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You know
that your name is safe in their mouth." Billy - age 4

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2004-01-13 10:38 AM

Kristin~
This is so very, very lovely~

'Wild porcelain dances gracefully
To fall upon soft, gentle knees'

How graceful this falls in the reading~

WELCOME to Passions~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2004-01-13 04:40 PM

After the other one I read I had to find your first post. Geez...what a talent! I can't wait to see more and welcome to passions!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2004-01-13 04:45 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Very much enjoyed your first post!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2004-01-13 04:45 PM

Kristin, have to admit, your title made me do a doubletake. Glad I came in for the gift you left us. Welcome to Passions! Hope you find everything here you've been looking for in a poetry home.

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Ravenwolfvoyager
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since 2003-12-25

Posts 326

9 posted 2004-01-13 06:15 PM

Kristen, this one made me cry too!! :-)It was a wonderful, brilliant write.

Nahgied
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since 2004-01-11

Posts 9

10 posted 2004-01-13 06:17 PM

very sincere...i enjoyed.

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

11 posted 2004-01-13 07:30 PM

Hello Kristin

Welcome to Passions and thank you for sharing your talent with us. I will look forward to reading more.

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

12 posted 2004-01-13 11:37 PM

You are a very fine writer. This actually made me cry! Welcome to Passions.

Saunni
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

13 posted 2004-01-14 12:20 PM

Beautiful this is and so thought out... so much better then I could ever do. Great write!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain.

Saunni
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

14 posted 2004-01-14 12:21 PM

By the way... Welcome here!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain.

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

15 posted 2004-01-14 01:09 AM

Welcome to Passions Kristen. I enjoyed this piece very much. It is a great piece to make a grand enterance with. Well done and bravo...but then as one who once was from Ontario I didn't doubt you'd do any less. 8-)

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

16 posted 2004-01-17 07:21 PM

(tears fall down my cheeks) This is such a beautifully sad debut hat made me cry, dearest friend, I love all of God's creations and it made me sad imagining the little bird, but I know God will always feed His sparrows and they shall prevail! God Bless You! Welcome to Passions, sweet Kristin, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristin, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Martie

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Posts 28049
California

17 posted 2004-01-17 08:15 PM

Kristin...I love birds...this poem touched my heart. Welcome to Passions!

Kristin Eve
Member

since 2004-01-13

Posts 89
On, Canada

18 posted 2004-01-18 02:58 AM

thank you so much everyone... your compliments mean more to me than you'll ever know. I have never really had someone to share my words with... and now i suddenly have so many!

You all write so beautifully, that i find myself spending hours here...

just simply feeling your beautiful poetry.
thank you. thank you so much.

"Who you are speaks so loudly...I can hardly hear what you are saying"

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