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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-01-11 12:48 PM


I wrote the the first verse of Lonely Dance as an idea on the Open Scroll Tag.  

Lynn who I have unfortunately lost contact with then replied with a verse and over a month and a quarter we wrote alternative verses, the poem being very down to earth.

The rest of the verses wouldn't have happened without Lynn who is very talented.

I can't give details about Lynn in this day and age but without her something that at times was a bit near the knuckle wouldn't have happened.

Someone commented on Lonely Dance that they would have liked the name of the Supermarket.

I wonder whether they would say the same with the original words plus extended version.

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Lonely Dance Revisited

In the supermarket we danced
Back and forwards in our song
Of failed romance
Challenging our courage and turning circle
Hesitating in anguish lost
We passed our dreams and desires
Dreaming of you with blood red meat
Feeling for you in dark brown coffee
Words sprung amongst the batteries
Disappeared amongst the beer
We danced the dance of baskets
The tango of trollies
Hiding our eyes
Avoiding our tongues
To speak in passing
In the street we danced
Your short skirt and my long coat
In our eyes we spoke
Nothing but desire
In the night we danced
Heating our bones
Desiring bare nothings
Wrestling alone
Whilst our minds lived
In the real world of our selves
In your earthy look
You took the time to register for me
A money saving offer
To my lust and my cost
A time for ourselves cut from the bargain hunters
Stopped by early closing
We trembled to crescendo
I bought beyond any means to delay the departure
But the cashier closed
With a smile
A Major leap for mankind
In the way we loved
Without needing to
Touching your eyes
With faint images of frozen delight
To whisper blown air
For our delight
Until we dance again

On rainbows we danced
remebering all the colors of our love
charmed by the neon green
and the breathtaking view
of how it all could have turned out.
Slipping down to the end of a fairy dream
caught inside a Hans Christen Anderson tale
you were Cinderella and I the prince
twirling around in magic
but like it always does
the clock struck 12
and it was over leaving us refeashed and longing for more
till we could dance again...
until we could.

Echoing light to household
Poster beds queued pumping
Laser beams to drift gently
Echoing puff pastry
To our honeymoon ideal
In toneless music
We switched chariots
Yours with steel
Mine with mushrooms
And we have until 4.00
4.00 we have only to cook
Ourselves

We danced in the fire
we felt its flames lick our scorched skin
we dined with dainty blue china
drinking the heat from tea kettle
We moved in one accord
we drifted through a dream
we lived
we loved
we fought
we cried
we danced
we danced
the dance of love and life.
Now all we dance is memories and dreams
But we still dance.

We danced in the fire
we felt its flames lick our scorched skin
we dined with dainty blue china
drinking the heat from tea kettle
We moved in one accord
we drifted through a dream
we lived
we loved
we fought
we cried
we danced
we danced
the dance of love and life.
Now all we dance is memories and dreams
But still we dance.
6 We danced on heated coffee
We licked melted cream
We wildly swept the table
We upset all we seemed
We splinted cups of coffee
Pastries to unknown
We made ourselves fools
So we could be at home
We failed at all we did
And thus began anew
We screwed up
Everyone but ourselves
Your kiss was just brand new
If our dreams
We loved
In our tries
We are a mess
But maybe tomorrow
We wont be second best

Our glances hit 500(degrees)
as if we were baked roast pie
we forgot about everything
we made choices unwise
tho it didnt seem so at the time
love ran out of rhyme
we tasted every flavor of skittles
nipping at the one in your shirt
the one from your finger tips
the one still wet from your kiss.
We did what we thought right
afterwards how we did fight
We were wrong You were the light
then you, my dream, I lost sight
destruction went from love to might.

The only table heated that night
Was the one we sat behind
We never left the onlookers
Firey thoughts admired
We didn't go for love
We were just on fire
Chucking down our water
Every choice unwise
Ours seem stupid
We foul everthing we try
Like rubberlooking for cupid
We pay the garage for every sty
Love never ran
We never got that way
The stock market loved today
Branded "stocklover cupid" to our ass
We bowled each other over
Ripping at our shirts
I left my wallet behind again
You supplied the dirt


The grim reaper stole cupids arrow
the was supposed to hit you and me
making us sorry
that we should ever be
but it didnt quite work that way
and we cant forget
we remember everyday
the fire that lite in your eyes
the way I fit you
I was the exact size
we dream about what could have been
and then we recall when
you kissed me for the first time
when I tried my first pick up line
we laughed over what I said
your gorgeous eyes would glow
with you in my bed
shared memories and dreams that lie
the innocent way you look
when u cry
the generous side you showed to me
back when we were free
now we just wrestle with what ifs
caking dried mud in sore wounds.

I found you electric in the batteries
I lost you in the beer
Grim Reaper was on discount
The store was growing near
He fied his arrow into my heart
Speared my Amex too
I supposed that mattered more to me
I'd lost more than you
I've never been sorry
We screwed everything we tried
Up against the wall, cashier desk, your hide
Fire flaming from your mouth
My cards went up in smoke
Now we have asbestos bags
And underwear to coach
You were the perfect pitch
We laid roads by the mile
Burnt them in an instance
We were the style
Incandescent we shared memories and dreams that lie
Putting out my fire with your tears
There we lied
In innocense I took you
In love I came back
Never any capture
Just the cactus that you lacked
I always applied the mud
To salve your every dream
I never could be more
Than below
Your best dreams


maybe we went about it all wrong
this lonely dance
without a song
I`m afraid to ask
I`m scared to try
so I just stare blankly to the sky
in awe and wondering
as I often am about you
coz I lost more then you too
your were the last file
the last paper on my desk
I kept puttin you off
but now I`ve no more room to shelf
your memory inside me
its waging its war
leaving me realzing I know I want more
more heartache and tears
if thats at its best
just for the chance to test
and to try
to face all my fears
to love you once more
if you can deal
with the thought of me by your side
maybe this time we can do it all differantly?

How did we go about this lonely song
We danced poetry
Without words
We didn’t fail
We didn’t know how to succeed
In the time to learn and understand
We destroyed the understanding
We lost nothing
We were too afraid to venture
We filled up our memories
With visions of wonder
Dancing on neon green rainbows
We changed the colour to yellow
There was never a fear of you by my side
Only the fear I had to catch you first
How could I trap an untamed freedom loving spirit
Tie her down to tamed delights
Blown on central heating
Across old matted sofas
That yearned passion from the mounded springs
There walls yelled sex
I yelled quietly
What had I bought a coffee table
Tying you to me
Destroyed you and we tried
In the danger, in the chase, in space
We lived
In comfort
We died


© Copyright 2004 Dave Page - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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1 posted 2004-01-11 12:56 PM


I know about the mispellings and everything but in fairness I have put this with all it's mistakes as we wrote it across the internet.

Dave

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519

2 posted 2004-01-11 01:10 PM


Dave,
   This was long, and i usually don't read longer work, but it was worth it.  Your imagery was so rich, i felt i was a little mouse in the background watching all this go by.  Enjoyed.   ~Sadelite~


     "We laid roads by the mile
      Burnt them in an instance"

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-01-11 01:49 PM


wow, is all I can say, a grieving heart speaks volumns...this was astounding
DavePage
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4 posted 2004-01-18 04:42 PM


I know it is a long poem and a long read

Thanks for taking the time to read it and comment

Much appreciated

Dave

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