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McLean
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state of marital bliss

0 posted 2004-01-10 05:05 PM


You, my love, are my feathers & flames.
Though your body is shot, your spirit remains.
Thirty-five and technically called an antique,
There's much more to you than just your physique.

Nevermind that you're loaded & have lots of gas.
You enjoy going topless - now that's what I call class!
Aluminum heads, all shiny & new,
You now have a 6-speed transmission, too.
Fuel-injected for maximum drive,
With a Pontiac engine 455.

Many men have loved you in the past,
But their love for you, it didn't last.
Now I'm proud to have you as my own,
To shelter you and give you a home...

in my garage.

My wife can't invision this beauty I see,
As she stares at your frame with no doors & no seats.
Assure her, I do, that you'll win at the show
In your dress of new metal, painted Viper yellow.


*wrote this for my husband to post in his "man-car-fixing-upper" forum, and wanted to share.I have lost my love to the garage these days, as he is hanging out with his '69 Firebird.



© Copyright 2004 McLean - All Rights Reserved
skyshine
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1 posted 2004-01-10 05:38 PM


So you're a car widow? I'm sure your husband got a smile from this.

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2004-01-10 05:43 PM




(giggles) Yay! Every car needs a home and someone to take it for more than just a spin but also keep it snug in the garage, and sounds like you both are just the ones to make this Viper special, yay! (angel hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet McLean, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2004-01-10 05:56 PM


We have an immense potential of love ... also for cars.
This is a very good write!
Enjoyed.
Love, Margherita

Michelle_loves_Mike
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4 posted 2004-01-10 08:36 PM


Cool part is,,,you'll look fab in shades,,,,,decorating the passenger seat,,,and he'll have done all the work!!!!!!
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2004-01-10 11:02 PM


Nice writing...hope he remembers its you he sleeps with at night and not the car...James
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6 posted 2004-01-11 05:29 PM


LOL... What a delight this is! *S* Instead of complaining, you created... way to go! *S*
Suetang
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7 posted 2004-01-11 09:11 PM


This was truly a "classic" piece of writing and so much enjoyed by this reader.  I was smiling throughout and loved each and every word.

P.S.  I am sorry for your loss!lol  Hopefully for your sake it might just be a phase your husband is going through??

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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8 posted 2004-01-11 09:16 PM


Really cute write...very much enjoyed.
Hugs~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

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