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Brad_Smith
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since 2004-01-09
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Dallas, Texas

0 posted 2004-01-09 06:51 PM



How can I forget when its all around
Above I see and in poetry it surrounds

There a Sky here a sky
painted in colors that fly

The Scottish Isle
Marked the farthest North
I ventured in quest

Thru green lush marsh
was a sky never harsh
in the Western Highland Hills

Upon the clickity clack
on the railroad track
every curve was pure delight

A new scene of beauty rare
a glimpse I saw but not a stare

the pace quickened
as the fog thickened
to the port of Malaig
I did not stop there

Oh but a Fairy I did see
to take me as far as time would allow
past a lighthouse beakon
and a cold grey sea

In the distance an image
a darkened mountain
appeared to beckon
a salty fountain

I took but a few steps to touch the shore
to capture photos and wanting more

Framed on the shore a reflected me
there in the distance a solemn tree
but surrounded on the foothills
yellow forgetmenots color instilled

A glimpse of the Isle could not compare
to the presence of a soul that feels so near

I touched the Isle first
then met her eyes

Twin beauties of course
mimic mirrored Skyes

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
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1 posted 2004-01-09 08:36 PM


I like the write.

I have to say I found it slightly heavy going but I think these words need to be read and re-read.

It wasn't easy for it to sit on the mind and command the mind to tongue.

Dave

Michelle_loves_Mike
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2 posted 2004-01-09 09:44 PM


must say,,,seeing the name Brad and twins in the same area,,,made a private joke run amuck thru my mind,,,,,still laughing,,,,however,,your words painted a picture that were vivid, and real,,,,good write
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

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