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Between Snowflakes
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Between Snowflakes |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{Distant stars of gentle autumn,} Far beneath dark shadows &fallen leaves of happiness Wings flutter in unknown space, as December blended time transparent, lovers fell to Remembering nights in silhouettes playing on satin walls; now watching silence in eyes of black Was it a move with-in? Did you miss the movement of angels? playing in wind Let rivers of pure water pour from your chambered heart, before the storm gathers its rage &leaves intent empty In between the breathless pause, and pain I am the snowflake falling endlessly ~*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
"I am the snowflake falling endlessly" my friend, your words fall in endless beauty on the pages..showing the beauty and the soul within.. if I were clever..I would attempt to write a poetic reply to this.. but I fear I like the clever gene.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Did you miss the movement of angels? playing in wind Oh, my goodness! What a beautiful keeper this is! hugs, Chris  "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren......   ok....I thought of something to say... my eyes might be green too, but they are not JEALOUS at all, but damn gal....they are full of pride!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Can't decide whether I am envious or just plain jealous of your talents. Hmmmm...wouldn't want to appear jealous, so henceforth, I am envious! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
In between the breathless pause, and pain I am the snowflake falling endlessly And, Lauren, don't ever forget how beautiful snow flakes are......  Hugs  Ethel |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Your delicate word-thoughts flow endlessly~ This is lovely~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gorgeous |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"In between the breathless pause, and pain I am the snowflake falling endlessly" This has got to be your best yet Lauren.. Beautiful..just beautiful! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Lauren~ Another beautiful post...  "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
thank you for the heartfelt replies, and for taking time to read.....MUWWWAAAHHHSSS and HUGSSSSSSSSSS Lauren~ ~*~ |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"Let rivers of pure water pour from your chambered heart, before the storm gathers its rage &leaves intent empty" ~ This was my favorite part of yet another beautifully written poem. And it snowed in Atlanta, yesterday. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Greeneyes, I just read Marge's snow poem and now yours -- I'm feeling like I am in a winter wonderland surrounded by snow fairies! No really, this was inspiring! |
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Kristin Eve Member
since 2004-01-13
Posts 89On, Canada |
I think this is a really beautiful poem! It leave a wintry taste in my mouth... i am not sure however... if i am misinterpreting the meaning of your words. I seem to get a sense of nostaligia and a mourning for a season past...autumn...but your title and focus at the end of the poem tells me i am probably wrong. I read it and i think of autumn leaves as ghosts... forgotten long and buried under the 'blue lips' of winter. I apologize if i misinterpreted such a beautiful poem. Either way, it was a great poem to end my evening on! Thanks for sharing! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are such a graceful poet... Just as lovely as ever, Lauren~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this just leaves me breathless...  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Beautiful writing!!!! For I love snowflakes!!!! Very nice!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
beautiful write  |
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Brigid WillowKeeper Member
since 2003-08-24
Posts 88OHIO IN USA |
Wow, your words project your feelings beautifully, my friend. And your form, is truley genuine. But it interrupts the flow a bit. |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Wow that was an astonishing write Green Eyes, I am captivated!! |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
"Did you miss the movement of angels? playing in wind" Just splendid, lovely. I especially like your phasing. You are a mentor. SG |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo pretty, dearest friend, and may you continue to glide peacefully to the heart of the winter crystal! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
It would seem that snow is in...Fortunately not for me...being further south. But, if I were there, it would be appropriate to have the pleasure of this poem then...as well as now. Well done Lauren. |
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