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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2004-01-08 10:37 AM



Conscience beats down on me
like the eyes
of an angry child like god
sending postrate
in instant confession
save me from myself
as I shrivel under self degredation
"I want to be good"
crying inside
til I decide that tressgression
has disconnected
from heavenly throne
Wandering alleys
looking to the skies
for nickels from heaven
Sadly
I only feel hell's fires
lapping my feet.

© Copyright 2004 Dan Mauro - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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1 posted 2004-01-08 10:58 AM


life gives us tests sometimes -- you are, at least, finding nickels and times, I hope.  Enjoyed reading this.  
LeeJ
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2 posted 2004-01-08 11:13 AM


can we withstand our own tests?

Wonderfully written Brad...very much enjoyed

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2004-01-08 11:31 AM


Dan~  

Another tribute to your talent and the way your mind works!  

Quote from my daughter the other day:

"Well, don't think too much, it messes with your head"  

Your words reminded me of that.

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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4 posted 2004-01-08 11:13 PM


Always glad to see and impressed by your burning writes.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

Brad Majors
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5 posted 2004-01-09 09:20 AM


thank you very much
Michelle_loves_Mike
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6 posted 2004-01-09 11:35 PM


"like the eyes
of an angry child like god"
VERY good,,,,this line,,,is so true,,,,,child like,,,,fast to love, fast to hurt, and never knowing quite why,,,
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

wordwizard
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7 posted 2004-01-10 01:18 AM


And I want to accept other points of view sometimes, be liked by many only to realize that that would be at the cost of defending a previously held view that is a pillar to my existance..and will have me liked by fewer men


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8 posted 2004-01-10 01:23 AM


been there, survived that...hated it, enjoyed reading though.  I guess we all feel that way sometimes.
Kahlil
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9 posted 2004-01-10 01:27 AM


Oh yeah, you are being pretty tough on yourself.  No one can do it better, usually.  I know.  ~K~
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