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RedStoneEB
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0 posted 2004-01-08 04:02 AM


Call my name oh lady
At the last hour of your time
And I shall ride forth to thee
Defeating all the enemies in sight
While id try to save one’s life

Yet if I fall within this battle
Id land upon the ground
And leafs would follow me down

Taking me on my last journey
Through memories of old
You’d appear to me once more

Laid in my arms
Under stars of dead kings
Within the forest

Beautiful roses would blossom
As you would give one last kiss
To my dying lips gone cold
Forging your soul to my heart forever more

  Then ones grip would fail
As Id return to the rivers
Flowing me to the other world

But do not shed a tear
Do not cry
For my lady it was nor your hour
Or time but mine…

[This message has been edited by RedStoneEB (01-10-2004 08:24 AM).]

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Professor Gloom
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1 posted 2004-01-08 05:19 AM


Seems like a theme for heroic couplets
Will look for the reworked version

Gloom

Kethry
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2 posted 2004-01-08 05:19 AM


This is lovely, so vivid with poignancy.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2004-01-08 12:03 PM


Lee~
I like it ... wonderful penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

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