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iliana
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0 posted 2004-01-08 12:52 PM


Weobaei, the word that takes a journey.  This is the third Weobaei piece -- the word that morphs. . . . .  This one introduces more players, Omahpaista and Manaeshte -- they will accompany some of the future Weobaei writings.

Weobaei wore a garment spun of
the finest threaded colors,
a magical gift from his father.
And when he walked among his brothers and sisters,
it was as if he walked on air,
so proud he was of his inheritance.

One night, the magic was stripped
from him,
his identity taken as well.
His brothers and sisters knew him not.
It was as if he had died a death.
Bound in slavery now, Weobaei behind a plow,
wearing only a cocoon.
He incubates in the field of earth,
wearing to work no facade of color;
no prized possession or
symbol of birthright to save him.
And as he turns in looming light, threads of toil around his soul,
he finds salvation, not famine.
  

Master, Manaeshte, takes note of
this faithful one, giving him a position of command with a powerful man.
Weobaei works as hard as he can gathering fruits of his labor from the land,
always trying to please Manaeshte,
singing and praising Manaeshte.


It seems he has been blessed with good fortune again,
though not with colored cloak, family, or inheritance.
Weobaei finds peace knowing his Master is served.  
Storehouses filled for his fellowman;
a gratifying task.
Doing thus, he finds the magic again.
Now he wears a garment of gold --
Manaeshte wraps it 'round him.  


Manaeshte comes at night

bringing vision and light

while Omahpaista dance at his feet.

How unnumbered are the days

when lived in God's ways.

The golden garment of His love,

surrounds the obedient Weobaei.



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Professor Gloom
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1 posted 2004-01-08 05:16 AM


Interesting,
Not familiar with this mythos
But enjoyed the read.
that’s the greatest joy of poetry
the expression also teaches


Gloom

martiniat8
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2 posted 2004-01-08 06:53 AM


WOW
iliana
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3 posted 2004-01-08 11:11 AM


Prof. Gloom -- thanks....if you have a chance, read the first two about Weobaei -- I am taking this someplace, bit by bit.  At least I hope I am.

iliana
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4 posted 2004-01-08 11:13 AM


M8 -- thanks for your comment.
Sadelite
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5 posted 2004-01-08 11:49 PM


iliana,
   I see you've done it!  I like your play on letters junctures and sounds,
      
      " obedient Weobaei "

Also like the use of looming:

"And as he turns in looming light, threads of toil around his soul"

                Sadie  

P.S.iliana, reread my Pavane's Blossom.  I changed the ending.   It's nice...  No need to post back, but just check it out.

iliana
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6 posted 2004-01-09 03:45 AM


Thanks, Sadie.  Have a great day!
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2004-01-09 11:28 PM


Nice writing...James
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8 posted 2004-01-09 11:47 PM


I am enjoying this journey you are taking us on and look forward to installment 4, beautifully written.
choshi
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9 posted 2004-01-10 02:53 AM


Inventive, imaginative with a beautiful message
iliana
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10 posted 2004-01-10 10:01 PM


JamesMichael -- thanks for saying so.
iliana
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11 posted 2004-01-10 10:03 PM


Hi, Mysteria -- glad your following the journey - it's been a really interesting one......stay tuned!  
iliana
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12 posted 2004-01-10 10:05 PM


Choshi -- (like the name!) -- thank you for the wonderful feedback -- yes, this journey has been interesting for me and I'm glad you can come along!  I liked the post that you left about the arthritis!    

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13 posted 2004-04-09 11:17 AM


This was such an interesting series, I just had to collect it all.  Enjoyed!
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