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Open Poetry #30

Elves (rewritten)

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

0 posted 2004-01-05 06:56 PM

Within the forests, sprinkled pixie dust lurks
Across woodland rivers, fairies roam the shores
Through trees of old sheltered under stars of youth
Gathered in the mists ancient elves dwell

Whispered words of wisdom spoken
Shadowed with inner beauty’s aura
Eyes of pure blue laced with memories
Of those once gazed upon natures wonders

Embedding souls deep into fantasies world
Where elvish tongue is uttered
Smoothing minds of those listening
Cormamin niuve tenna’ elea lle au’
(My heart shall weep until it sees thee again)

Impaling an message to hearts
“Return one day to this place
Where your journey begun”
And elven maidens shall send
A kiss to lips of slowly dying minds
Awakening the discovery of ones self
Longing mortal souls to linger on

Till the day when hearts breathe their last
And body turns to dust scattering dreams
Thoughts, memories to unborn children
Bringing forth the passing of knowledge
Containing Wisdom of the elven race

[This message has been edited by RedStoneEB (01-06-2004 04:43 PM).]

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

1 posted 2004-01-05 06:59 PM

I like this alot...I have some ideas but I shall keep them to myself since this is a non-critique poem...well done.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

2 posted 2004-01-05 07:03 PM

enjoyed

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

3 posted 2004-01-05 07:10 PM

I will get in trouble for publishing a 4th poem but I hope you will see why.

The chorus in the end was the only things I released.

My stock phrase - go into the words find the real emotion and scintalate.

I like the words but when I see talent and no-one was there as I laboured and self-explored the question is this.

Did I learned deeper mysteries by self-exploration or did I waste my personal time without any avenue to utter words.

Dave

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