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James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-01-05 12:26 PM

Last Night

she
trembled
my name

shuddering
sighs of me

still

she was
you

[This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (01-05-2004 01:20 AM).]

harash
Member

since 2003-12-27

Posts 99
India

1 posted 2004-01-05 12:45 PM

small but powerfully pointing something...

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-01-05 12:45 PM

wtil I'm not sure about.

Nice structure, can you write so more of it.

It hints of unknown meanings and questions of why.

Dave

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-01-05 02:11 AM

packed a punch, for sure

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-01-05 02:32 AM

Wooooo.......boy, great write, bad situation! I appreciate your writing.

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2004-01-05 08:07 AM

sometimes,,,no matter how hard you try,,,,its "them".....happily,,,mine only seems to pop up at the butcher,,,,,,

Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2004-01-05 11:49 AM

Jamie...I understand the pleasure and the heartache in this. Very touching. Hugs!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-01-05 12:02 PM

Whoa! Where DID your fantasy go?
Well done!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2004-01-05 12:02 PM

heart hugssss, and understanding.....

Lauren~

~~**~~
This morning theres a calm I cant explain
By the time I recognize this moment it will be gone,
I will bend light pretending it lingers on

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

9 posted 2004-01-05 12:06 PM

very cool - simple, direct, yet poignant.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2004-01-05 12:41 PM

And here you have defined a particular corner of purgatory... where even the greatest pleasure is branded with pain. This powerful write touches deeply, my friend.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2004-01-05 03:02 PM

Oh my ... ~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Terrina
Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 166
California

12 posted 2004-01-05 03:08 PM

You said a lot using so few words.
That is what its all about. We don't need to throw them out there all over the place.
A few will due sometimes

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

13 posted 2004-01-05 03:29 PM

WOW!!
Dang....this is SO good!
Hugs~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

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