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Open Poetry #30

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ranidae_poet
Member

since 2003-11-05

Posts 66
Texas,USA

0 posted 2004-01-04 08:49 PM

Stifled moans
Broken breaths

I crave you

Immoral motivations
Unwrapped temptations

I embrace you

Unscathed emotions
Unbridled pleadings

I hear you

As untapped possibilities
Unfold before me

And

I Feel you
Finally fall

[This message has been edited by ranidae_poet (01-05-2004 01:57 PM).]

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

1 posted 2004-01-04 09:16 PM

Your title seems to fit your last lines . . .
Or, the title sets the tone, and the last lines confirm it.

wintertao
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

2 posted 2004-01-04 09:57 PM

very nice I liked this alot...and a great ending.

ranidae_poet
Member

since 2003-11-05

Posts 66
Texas,USA

3 posted 2004-01-04 11:35 PM

krawdad, I am thrilled to know that I was able to take my thoughts and portray them to you in a manner which enabled you to feel what i was feeling at that moment. Just as I hoped, the word escaped via these phone lines and you, where ever you are, understand.

alan6501
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since 2004-01-03

Posts 89
PA

4 posted 2004-01-05 12:45 PM

I think this is very honest and pretty. I particularly like your honest about the "immoral motivations and unwrapped tempatations." Good work.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-01-05 12:54 PM

it's a nice feeling...I remember

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