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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-01-04 06:56 PM


Just another idea from when I was interested in Dance Poems where the dance would tell a poem.

Bind Dance, Fertility Dance, Lonely Dance, Slob and the Lady were all from alround this time.

This was an attempt as humour but it never seem to make it.

Dave

You wore everything
I wore nothing
You were cool
I was hot
You sparkled
I dripped
My heart around your feet
We danced floodlit
By your radience
Blending with my skin tone
Magic flew around your hair
Binding your shoulders
To my imagination
You wore heels
I went flat
You were magnificent in red
We blurred as we danced
Blinding my escorts of blue
To a night I will never forget
Your honor



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devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
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1 posted 2004-01-04 08:43 PM


I really liked it. A beautiful peice. I felt the dance. Nice job.
         *Allison*

"Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland."

DavePage
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2 posted 2004-01-05 12:38 PM


Thanks but I think people are being too kind.

Romance and Binds Dance were I felt the weakest.

The Fertility Dance with it's almost earth driven beat of demand was the oddest and the one I liked.

Thanks for the comments

Dave

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