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Krawdad
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0 posted 2004-01-01 10:59 PM



               If You Get Dizzy in the Southern Hemisphere, Do You Spin Clockwise?


               Free fall is not the right term
               nor even suspended animation
               more like levitation
               held up by some
               insubstantial power
               felt but not seen

               The weight of comfort
               has been spilled
               The pull of caring
               has gone slack
               as I lie adrift
               unsettled and unmoved

               The hollow
               of this empty bark
               riding high and vulnerable
               echoes its failed mission
               in useless rhymes
               and verses unheard

               And since I appear
               invisible to you
               you will not see me reach
               for the tail feathers
               of a brave red bird
               rising from the ashes




                    ©  010104



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1 posted 2004-01-01 11:06 PM


has a woman ever told you...that you moved her to tears? well...you do...h
Martie
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2 posted 2004-01-01 11:18 PM


A touching poem, Krawdad.
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3 posted 2004-01-02 12:53 PM


you know I clicked on this one drawn by the title thinking perhaps a funny little piece was in store...what I got was something completely different and complete breathe stopping. It was deffinitly a heartstring puller, loved it.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

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4 posted 2004-01-02 01:47 AM


"the weight of comfort has been spilled"
haunting line

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5 posted 2004-01-02 02:35 AM


I'm with Helen here
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6 posted 2004-01-02 01:55 PM


Krawdad~
So touching~

'And since I appear
invisible to you
you will not see me reach
for the tail feathers
of a brave red bird
rising from the ashes'


Classic stuff !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2004-01-02 02:11 PM


well visit here more often, you are never invisible to us

Happy New Year Kraw...

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8 posted 2004-01-02 02:29 PM



This falls into itself,
then evolves upward again...

It's beautiful, Sir.
Thank you.

Terrina
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9 posted 2004-01-02 02:34 PM


You are great. That poem was wonderful. My father used to tell me, when you look at something and you can't imagine making it any better, it's perfect.
Well  my dear....I can't imagine making what you wrote any better....

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germany
10 posted 2004-01-02 02:35 PM


touching and wonderful!

turning mirrors upside down won't make dust fall off the ground, hiding wounds won't ease the pain, sleep won't make you whole again...

Christopher
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11 posted 2004-01-02 03:28 PM


and thusly, the phoenix rises anew.

nice.

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12 posted 2004-01-02 04:33 PM


Lotsa lovely images and how you managed to make such a sad tone seem to float mystifies me...

and since I feel qualified to answer your query having been dizzy in a southern atmosphere all of my life--the answer is, in fact, yes--but if I'm very quiet inside, not only do I spin clockwise, but I will come to rest pointing North with startling accuracy.

Love ya, E.

Kethry
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13 posted 2004-01-02 04:36 PM


The answer to the title is "Yes, clockwise, sideways and down under". The response to the poem is "Oh MY!"

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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