How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #30 Archive
 Be art to will, Fate, Hospitable
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Be art to will, Fate, Hospitable

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Ravenwolfvoyager
Member
since 12-25-2003
Posts 332


0 posted 12-31-2003 09:50 AM       View Profile for Ravenwolfvoyager   Email Ravenwolfvoyager   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ravenwolfvoyager

His ship sailed onward beneath the light of a relinquishing star,
On a sea of turmoil to a land afar;
He had captained this vessel for 4 months and three days fold,
In sought of land over the horizon for his ship to behold.

His convictions were strong in hopes of land,
For engraved on the bow was the words of man.
He contributed to his destiny,
By confronting tragedy;
And read aloud without conviction,

A sign of encouragement that contributed to his determination;
Believing and trusting that the words were magical,
He read aloud the words "Be art to will, Fate, Hospitable."

He was taunted and accompanied by 14 men strong
It was his eager aspiration to find land before long;
"Oh where be thee found" he began to proclaim,
For he knew that the patience of his crew had grown weary and vain.

He had captained this vessel for 5 months and ten days fold
For never finding land the crews patience grew cold.
Onward he sailed for the land that he had longed,
Until he heard whispers coming from outside of his cabin from 3 men strong.

The whispers overlapped and wasn't clear?
But he overheard his name a few times and something of food? Perhaps poison he feared?
The shadows crept onto the floor to replace the suns retreat;
As if the silhouette of a cat's claw scurried to grab his feet

Be of consequence to his demise,
And in aspiration to his surmise,
He heard a pounding at the door!
He scurried to the cabin window for the words that he adored,
And read aloud without conviction,
A sign of encouragement that contributed to his determination;

Believing and trusting that the words were magical,
He read aloud the words "Be art to will, Fate, Hospitable."

Looking back at the door which opened in full retreat,
Stood three orderlies wearing white clothing bringing him something to eat?
Reciting in unison as if to cast a spell He recited and recited those words that he embellished so well.

As the lightening flashed the sign became readable
For in place of "Be art to will, Fate, Hospitable,"
He read aloud Bartonville State Hospital.
© Copyright 2003 Ravenwolfvoyager - All Rights Reserved
Ravenwolfvoyager
Member
since 12-25-2003
Posts 332


1 posted 12-31-2003 11:01 AM       View Profile for Ravenwolfvoyager   Email Ravenwolfvoyager   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ravenwolfvoyager

I wanted to follow-up with this write. I hope that the subject matter doesn't offend anyone for in no way would I ever mean to cause harm by it. This is more an experimentation and a little self-discovery and I have gained some lessons by attempting to write something such as this.

With regards to the conclusions to this scenerio it warrants compassion and attention, it is important that we not cast judgement upon others less their beliefs and convictions are their ideals and sometimes of not of their own chosing.

Again, please accept my apologies for the topic. In no way do I make light of the seriousness. In the end understanding and self-realization is a far better conclusion and a wishful scenerio, but is not always the finality for some and that's where compassion and support is essential to all those effected by this topic. If there is any strong convictions please email me and I will remove it. Thank you.    

[This message has been edited by Ravenwolfvoyager (12-31-2003 11:02 AM).]

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


2 posted 12-31-2003 03:25 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Years [heck, decades] ago I visited by way of a psychology class, Camarillo State Hospital.  You brought that all back to me in one fell swoop as I read this.

You also brought back to mind the book I read about that same time, "I Never Promised You A Rose Garden."

Also..."One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest..."

You did a good job here.  What was your inspiration, exactly?
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 02-22-2002
Posts 9456
Michigan, USA


3 posted 12-31-2003 03:33 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

RWV:

There are few that would take the time to give explanation, or be so considerate.
I wanted to commend you for such exceptional caring.

This piece speaks to me of the comedy and tragedy that rests on the brink of every human's capacity to weather the storms.
Taken literally, you describe with much heart the passage on an illusionary journey...taken further, your muse embraced the shocking realization of receiving the nourishment needed, albeit perhaps not expected.  Wonderful job stepping outside your character.  
Enjoy your work very much.
TD
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 11-06-1999
Posts 43042
Florida's Foreverly Shores


4 posted 12-31-2003 06:55 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Jeff~
The versatility of your writing is to be applauded~
So I do ...

'it is important that we not cast judgement upon others less their beliefs and convictions are their ideals and sometimes of not of their own chosing'

Amen, kind sir ... amen~
You are such a tender person ... no one could possible misinterpret your intentions with this post ...~
Have a Happy New Year .. and let no one deter you from your writing~
You are very talented~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 10-29-2000
Posts 19275
Between the Lines


5 posted 12-31-2003 06:58 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

and I agree with my friends on here...
thank you for your thoughtful explanation.

You are an added pleasure to read.

~smiling~ and feeling a bit better
M
SharaRose
Member Elite
since 07-19-2003
Posts 2535
Somewhere out there~


6 posted 12-31-2003 07:43 PM       View Profile for SharaRose   Email SharaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SharaRose

Raven Wolf in your e-mail to me you said I had left a comment saying you should change the writing. Well not only did I not say that in my comment, but now I don't find my comment at all.. Why is that I wonder? In my comment I wrote I was sad if this was a personal experience you had been through. Please would you send me the link where I was supposed to have said that. You can e-mail me from the above icon like you did before. I cleaned out my e-amil acct. If you wrote me one it may have been sent back to you because I got a message that my acct was too full, Sorry.
Puzzled?
Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

Ratleader
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 01-23-2003
Posts 7179
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass


7 posted 12-31-2003 07:52 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

This is quality. You are going to be one of the bright lights of this group, and I'm proud you're in it.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Midnitesun
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 05-18-2001
Posts 29020
Gaia


8 posted 12-31-2003 11:32 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Loved the way you unraveled this one to get at a kernel of barest truth.
garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 09-29-2002
Posts 20064
Florida, USA


9 posted 01-01-2004 11:20 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Jeff, this is very exceptional writing, Sir. You write with a compassion and understanding from your heart that is very commendable. Don't let anyone discourage you from writing from your heart.

You are a very welcome addition to Passions and I hope to read many more of your poems.

Thank you for being so kind, and Happy New Year to you and yours,
Hugs,
Ethel
vandana
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Patricius
since 10-22-1999
Posts 10748
USA


10 posted 01-01-2004 11:53 AM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

really enjoyed this
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 09-21-1999
Posts 28608
California


11 posted 01-01-2004 02:56 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ravenwolf...Well done...Very thoughtfully written!  
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 08-26-99
Posts 46297
displaced


12 posted 01-02-2004 12:00 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

Suetang
Member Ascendant
since 03-07-2001
Posts 5275
Melbourne, Australia


13 posted 02-11-2004 09:31 PM       View Profile for Suetang   Email Suetang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suetang

Hello Jeff

I missed this one earlier but I am so glad I found it.  You write with such sincerity and compassion.  

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Ravenwolfvoyager will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #30 >> Be art to will, Fate, Hospitable Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors