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A B S T R A C T
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-=NYC=-

0 posted 2003-12-31 12:23 PM


- A B S T R A C T -
Brooklyn, NY
16.years.old
Written 12/29/03

Tall emeralds emerge in a field
Prized by wise giants
Every stalk’s value to us is sealed
In a world that is defiant
To teachings wealthy but dressed in rags
Whose pockets are full of green gems
Perceived to be mossy rocks kicked by forest stags
Seen blindly for they are life’s stem
So such lessons are rarely learned
Diamonds deemed glass
Wealth, scale of life for which we yearn
Weighed to determine class
Strawberry shrub, vibrant in red appeal
Appetizing for this hour
Turns like seasons to yellow, a new fruit revealed
A lemon, large but sour

© Copyright 2003 A B S T R A C T - All Rights Reserved
lovejunkie
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since 2003-12-31
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Indiana
1 posted 2003-12-31 12:26 PM


Very cool. Also cool that ur only 16 considering im 15. I just got on this little site deal but tis very cool.
Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2003-12-31 12:29 PM


WELCOME
your name fits your post! abstract, but as tasty as the sour lemon can be in the right recipe

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-12-31 01:08 AM


Welcome to Passions In Poetry.
I hope that you enjoy it here at PIP.
This is an interesting post.

Please, check your e-mail for a special
greeting from everyone at Passions.
Thanks,
Ethel/garysgirl
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lil' Angel
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4 posted 2003-12-31 01:54 AM


Welcome to passions.  you have an interesting style of writting poetry. I like it.

Lil' Angel


"There is no wisdom, no insight, no plan that can succeed against the Lord."  Proverbs 21:30



pandonov
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b/w conscience and insolence
5 posted 2003-12-31 01:56 AM


welcome A B S T R A C T , i enjoyed your first post
passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2003-12-31 02:55 AM




Hello!

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2003-12-31 09:18 AM



Your user name fits your style of writing.
Nothing is always as it appears.  Well done!
Welcome to Passions!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

vandana
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8 posted 2003-12-31 09:27 AM


enjoyed welcome to passions

[This message has been edited by vandana (12-31-2003 09:28 AM).]

chrissydome
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germany
9 posted 2003-12-31 10:12 AM


hello!
this is just wonderful. i really love your style!

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
10 posted 2003-12-31 10:15 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Much enjoyed your first post.
I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~          

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

LngJhnAg
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11 posted 2003-12-31 10:54 AM


Welcome to Passions - what a great poem you wrote to introduce yourself!

As the un-Official greeter it is my sad duty to warn you of Balladeer and Toerag.  They are both scalawags, and you should never believe a word they write that impugns my character.  You can trust my advice in all things (as long as you don't tell ANYBODY where you got it).  OK?

Aimster
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12 posted 2003-12-31 11:01 AM


Wonderful first post, and a very
interesting style of writing...I
like it! Enjoy your stay, this is
a wonderful place--looking forward
to reading more of your work!

Take care,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
13 posted 2003-12-31 11:01 AM


Wow...Very nice...loved this!

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

A B S T R A C T
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since 2003-12-31
Posts 27
-=NYC=-
14 posted 2003-12-31 01:55 PM


Thanks for all of the replies... but can you go a little more in-depth?
JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
15 posted 2003-12-31 06:25 PM


Nice writing...James
iliana
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16 posted 2004-01-01 03:00 AM


Welcome to PIP!  I thought this was excellent!  Wise beyond your years.
chrissydome
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germany
17 posted 2004-01-01 07:55 AM


i like the way you use colors to deepen the pictures you draw.

turning mirrors upside down won't make dust fall off the ground, hiding wounds won't ease the pain, sleep won't make you whole again...

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