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Patricia
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0 posted 2003-12-30 01:33 PM


Do You Still Know Me?

Lifted from my mind,
souvenirs of time
when words trickled
in fertile flow

A time long ago

When wisdoms would sing
breezy Verses of Spring,

Unobstructed
by unacceptance

‘Twas a time, I know

Whence,

By the same
silken silver string.

Under a single stream,
one marvelous moon beam,

We shared
moments as adventures
unafraid to be traced,
looped and laced
for all to see

When by my words, you had known me.

Now years have passed, we’ve grown apart
Our songs never sung quite as free
I ask this question in my heart
By my words, do you still know me?

[This message has been edited by Patricia (12-30-2003 01:38 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-12-30 01:52 PM



What I like about this, is that it not
only pays credence to where we get our
start in literary appreciation, but lets
the reader think "Yes, I have a book, that
gave me just these feelings!"  Then the reader
is off on a scavenger hunt to find THAT
book that turned their world around.

For me?  Heh.  It's Rod!

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2003-12-30 03:12 PM


we are often reminded... sometimes sadly..of the words or writers who first may have sparked something inside us.. and maybe sometimes wonder as well if the words we shared at some point or time actually are remembered... and if the person knows us still, through what we said  or wrote..

nicely done...

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2003-12-30 03:54 PM


Patricia
Each moment is similar but not quite the same. Enjoyed Happy New Year

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2003-12-30 04:57 PM


unafraid to be traced,
looped and laced
for all to see

those were the days...

Happy New Year, Patricia

hugs
M

Ericc
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5 posted 2003-12-30 06:30 PM


What a beautiful flow of words!

Eric

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-12-31 04:45 AM


this is sad for me...but so beautiful
ambrish
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7 posted 2003-12-31 07:01 AM


Now years have passed, we’ve grown apart
Our songs never sung quite as free
I ask this question in my heart
By my words, do you still know me?
             lovely.

vandana
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8 posted 2003-12-31 09:29 AM


enjoyed
BluesSerenade
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9 posted 2004-01-02 12:01 PM


During the holidays, I thought of several people
who have come and gone in my life,
......it does make you wonder.

You wrote the feeling so well Patricia.
A thoughtful poem indeed~ *enjoyed*

GG
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10 posted 2004-01-02 04:01 PM


I guess sometimes its needed...
to find our own words, in light of everything.
You certain have,
and they are beautiful

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

LiquidMidnight
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11 posted 2004-01-02 04:20 PM


I enjoyed this one very much. I really like the form.
Margherita
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12 posted 2004-01-03 09:11 AM


There is always a time for doubting ... a moment's melancholy.

But your words, dear Patricia, hold still magic .... no doubt here.

Love, Margherita

HopeS
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13 posted 2004-01-03 11:50 AM


Excellently expressed how over time , people do change , some things are never quite the same

Hope

JamesMichael
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14 posted 2004-01-03 08:04 PM


Nice thoughts...James
Startime55
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15 posted 2004-01-03 08:07 PM


*sigh* it feels like a dream never quite fulfilled...Wonderful writing...

steavenr
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16 posted 2004-01-10 10:35 PM


"Unobstructed
by unacceptance"

I loved that phrase especially; really loved the whole poem.  Great and warm read, inspiring.

iliana
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17 posted 2004-01-10 10:40 PM


Brava!  Brava!
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