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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-12-30 10:20 AM



Flat the fall and sound
Of feet on stone ledge
Hung as it is on hillside
Where in fall leaf litter resides
Moist and earthy of oak in smell

Such small sounds as to echo
Off nearby bluff
Even drip of rain from limb
Is heard twice
Once in real
Another ghost to follow
Faded pale
Yet there

Here I think of you
And of the cool respite found
On mossy ground
When summer fought overhead
To defeat our climb

Your limbs bare and brown
Against mossy green
Sketched pencil lines of memory
That does not hold the warm silk of touch
Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much

It is quiet here
  No sighs sound against my ear
And the only heave of breast is mine
As I struggle again to make
This steep climb.

Younger then
  Perhaps more alive
But today I remember a few
Of the simple things
    I often deny
And listen to the echoed haunts
Of falling sounds

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-12-30 10:23 AM


Where in fall leaf litter resides
Moist and earthy of oak in smell

Such small sounds as to echo
Off nearby bluff
Even drip of rain from limb
Is heard twice
Once in real
Another ghost to follow
Faded pale
Yet there

~*~

It feels so good to breathe again...

Copperbell
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2 posted 2003-12-30 10:25 AM


I like this...

But today I remember a few
Of the simple things
   I often deny

How life catches us and holds us in its grasp, that we forget the simple things.

Duncan
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3 posted 2003-12-30 10:29 AM


"Such small sounds as to echo
Off nearby bluff
Even drip of rain from limb
Is heard twice
Once in real
Another ghost to follow
Faded pale
Yet there"

Who need coffee??  
A read for the New Year...thanks bud!

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4 posted 2003-12-30 10:35 AM


Cpat Hair
Well done, good write and read, enjoyed.
Happy New Year.

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5 posted 2003-12-30 10:46 AM


CPat~
I can tell you that this one will stay with me for a long time as possibly one of your finer pennings~

May the coming year treat you tenderly with many inked-thoughts for sharing~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

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6 posted 2003-12-30 11:08 AM


But today I remember a few
Of the simple things
    I often deny
And listen to the echoed haunts
Of falling sounds


Capt. Ron, it is so good to see you here this morning.
I've really missed your beautiful paintings of words.
Hugs to you,
Ethel

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2003-12-30 11:16 AM


"Your limbs bare and brown
Against mossy green
Sketched pencil lines of memory
That does not hold the warm silk of touch
Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much"

Ron, do you have even a clue how much I love, admire and covet your words?  

Thank you for the very nice surprise...

Love ya mister.

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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8 posted 2003-12-30 11:27 AM


"Your limbs bare and brown
Against mossy green
Sketched pencil lines of memory
That does not hold the warm silk of touch
Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much"

Gawd how you have been missed!
So good to read you this morn Captain.
I have felt as though I've been floundering...
but now I can breathe once more.
All the best in the new year to you and yours.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

ice
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9 posted 2003-12-30 11:39 AM


Wonderful use of language....much applause
Thank you for bringing some romance back into poetry, as expressed here in the use of neglected English words and phrasing...
________ice
  ><>

Martie
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10 posted 2003-12-30 11:47 AM


Ron...With such vivid imagery you display your heart...it is beautiful!  Hugs!
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11 posted 2003-12-30 11:58 AM


Here I think of you
And of the cool respite found
On mossy ground
When summer fought overhead
To defeat our climb

Your limbs bare and brown
Against mossy green
Sketched pencil lines of memory
That does not hold the warm silk of touch
Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much


~~

wooohoooooo.....loving reading this from you this morning...

   hugsss


Lauren~

~~**~~
This morning theres a calm I cant explain
By the time I recognize this moment it will be gone,  
I will bend light pretending it lingers on

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12 posted 2003-12-30 12:01 PM


Flat the fall and sound
Of feet on stone ledge
Hung as it is on hillside
Where in fall leaf litter resides
Moist and earthy of oak in smell

Such small sounds as to echo
Off nearby bluff
Even drip of rain from limb
Is heard twice
Once in real
Another ghost to follow
Faded pale
Yet there
=====================

Your limbs bare and brown
Against mossy green
Sketched pencil lines of memory
That does not hold the warm silk of touch
Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much
=====================

Younger then
  Perhaps more alive
But today I remember a few
Of the simple things
    I often deny
And listen to the echoed haunts
Of falling sounds

====================================

Did ya just know how much I needed to read your words today?

As always your imagery mirrors my own memories,and so often my camera lens as well. The subtle rhyme and assonance of this added to its many pleasures.
I am listening to Native American flute music as I read...your words and the music's serenity belong together...

your words belong where they can be inhaled....

dont doubt the moth




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13 posted 2003-12-30 12:02 PM




passing shadows
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14 posted 2003-12-30 12:22 PM


always love to read you

I love the feelings I get when I do

Patricia
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15 posted 2003-12-30 01:13 PM


Oh Ron, I missed you.  I was thinking about you this morning and imagine my delight when you were here today.  It seems we may be thinking along the same lines here...although, dear man, I could never match your lines.  Not making comparisons (you sat on me one about that, remember?) just speaking the truth.

A wonderful write as always.

Patricia

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16 posted 2003-12-30 01:21 PM


"Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much"

"But today I remember a few
Of the simple things
    I often deny
And listen to the echoed haunts
Of falling sounds"


even the rain
softly kissing
the face
of the lake
echoes in rings

scorpio
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17 posted 2003-12-30 07:22 PM


Like so many of your writes, this one rekindles feeling and memories in me.  Good to read your word again...and to remember.

believe in what your heart feels...

Goodknight
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18 posted 2003-12-30 07:49 PM


wonderful imagery here - loved this poem - Paul
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19 posted 2003-12-30 08:05 PM


enjoyed
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20 posted 2003-12-30 08:49 PM


You're a legend in your own time!!
I liked the same verse, so bad!!  

Speech, speech!
Happy New Year, Cpat~


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21 posted 2003-12-30 10:25 PM


"Here I think of you
And of the cool respite found
On mossy ground
When summer fought overhead
To defeat our climb"

that climb has a familiar reach to it, and I feel the cool moss

dang, but you are good

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (12-31-2003 11:28 AM).]

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22 posted 2003-12-30 10:58 PM


Sheer perfection. Love this. Chris

"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet."
-Plato



    

Susan Caldwell
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23 posted 2003-12-31 10:14 AM


Happy New Year!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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24 posted 2003-12-31 11:50 AM



  Forgot the library button...

Sudhir Iyer
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25 posted 2003-12-31 02:35 PM


oh yes, the beautifully written words of Ron... they have been missed, my friend...

thanks...

regards
sudhir

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26 posted 2003-12-31 03:19 PM


extremely fascinating feel to this, it seems to lap back and forth with a love of someone gone and a love of the beauty and solitude of nature...something like a combination of Kilmer's "Trees" and Frost's "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening."  Oooh, I loved the title and loved the "read."

Just shoveled my walk and but for the scraping of the shovel and the chit-chat with a neighbor, it was a beautiful quiet, a lovely solitude of "winterness."

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Marge Tindal
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27 posted 2004-01-02 01:32 PM



from the Library for another round~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

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28 posted 2004-01-02 02:47 PM


Well all they said, but my favorite part of your poem (and my own life actually), aside from your beautiful painting is when the only breath I hear is my own. Now that to me is sheer poetry.

A Very Happy New Year To You and Yours!                    
Let there be peace on earth

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29 posted 2004-01-02 05:34 PM


"Your limbs bare and brown
Against mossy green
Sketched pencil lines of memory
That does not hold the warm silk of touch
Just brings to mind the ache I had
Of wanting you so much"


Sigh Ron, I've missed reading you.

this is a keeper.

Maree

"I can't believe
I've lost the very best of me"

Natalie Merchant


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30 posted 2004-01-03 05:23 AM



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31 posted 2004-01-03 09:09 PM


Ron...I love where this poem takes me
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32 posted 2004-01-03 09:55 PM


What wonderful descriptives here, Captain! Beautiful work.

Hope all is well with you.


Corinne

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