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steve
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since 2000-08-15
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0 posted 2003-12-27 12:25 PM


Im posting this merely for the fact it will help me to share my feelings.  its a {edited by moderator...AGAIN}  poem i know, so i dont need to be patronized. ty.

~~~
existence without meaning
too smart for my own good
ive was lost in this world
tortured til no end

but i met this girl
or she found me
too good to be true
but simply irresistable

she gave me hope
she gave me love
she gave me what i needed to hear
she took away my fears

but that was then
and this is now
she broke my heart
ruined my whole world

when you cannot trust
the only one you love
spoiling you at first
its a kick to the nuts

but woe is me
im lost again
do i have the strength to cope
or is this going to be the bitter end?


[This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-27-2003 09:05 AM).]

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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
1 posted 2003-12-27 01:07 AM


give yourself credit, you are writing an emotion we all deal with....I KNOW exactly how this feels (present day) hugsssss for brighter tomorrows...


Lauren~

This morning there’s a calm
I can’t explain-
By the time I recognize this
moment it will be gone  
I will bend light
pretending it lingers on

WannabePoet
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since 2003-12-10
Posts 62
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2 posted 2003-12-27 01:21 AM


Writing with emotion, can be very draining. Or it can be very theraputic, it all depends on how we look at it.
Your words flow nicely, and the point is very well brought home.
May the passion ever flow through your pen.
Tobi

ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2003-12-27 01:23 AM


This emotion you share is entwined with trimmings of anger and sorrow...
You did well to find words that described and opened the wound.
The surgery is difficult, but then there is healing.
TD

A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
4 posted 2003-12-27 03:16 AM


How can a broken heart be judged?

You cannot measure pain, because you cannot measure love.....

You heart was crying and I listened to every word....

Dry your tears....the sun will shine another day....see the rainbow through the rain!

You expressed pain well with your poem.

Was that gentle enough?
~ARH


Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

[This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (12-27-2003 03:18 AM).]

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-12-27 04:11 AM


you have the strength
Midnitesun
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Gaia
6 posted 2003-12-27 10:12 AM


arghh
Dontcha hate that feeling? that this really IS the last straw? maybe time and distance will sweep that feeling away and the chaffing will subside. good luck

harash
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since 2003-12-27
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7 posted 2003-12-27 11:37 AM


steve its a beautiful piece...

Harash

Michelle_loves_Mike
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8 posted 2003-12-27 02:20 PM


that is a kick,,even the ladies can feel
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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Melbourne, Australia
9 posted 2003-12-27 04:06 PM


Hi Steve

It is so obvious that this was written on pure emotion and it takes courage to do that.  It is so important to let it out and writing is the best way to do that.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Ravenwolfvoyager
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since 2003-12-25
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10 posted 2003-12-27 04:11 PM


Yes I understand, sometimes love can see as evil is evil. I've understood where you are coming from. Why do most devastating life events have some affiliation with love. There are thorns in the flower. Remember to be yourself. Your thoughts, your emotions, your negatives and your positives are all what make you who you are...love thy self. Very well done my friend.  

[This message has been edited by Ravenwolfvoyager (12-27-2003 04:12 PM).]

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

11 posted 2003-12-27 04:38 PM


Steve

It is too easy to go for everything and everyone when it goes bad.

It is too bloody easy to do it.

You dont need people telling you it will be ok, and all the "other Fish in the Sea" business, since the nets have been out since before you got up".

NO existence is without meaning and chancing your hand in romance is something, you are sometimes expected to do.

The difference is knowing when you should and if you ever work it out, let the rest of us know.

Look mate, once of the nicer things that keeps you together with a woman is the thought than you dont have to go through meeting and winning her again, which is what you are suffering from.

Someone said to me you look at them in the morning and you "Love them or You Dont".

The number of times I've wanted to have a quiet work with this guy are legand.

No words get you out of it;  no words take away the pain.

Only you can do that but dont let a lack of language prevent from doing so.

You dont expect them to be with you when you are with a woman, dont take it outside.

Two people in a relationship, apart from the relatives, lawyers etc.

regards

Dave

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
12 posted 2003-12-27 04:45 PM


steve
Perhaps bittersweet, enjoyed.

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
13 posted 2003-12-27 09:56 PM


steve,

honest sincere write, no one can
fault you for that!

take care,
amy

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