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anwaarhassan
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0 posted 2003-12-25 11:11 AM


Broken Wings


How could you leave me in such despair?
Could it be that you just don’t care?
Did we not vow that come what may
At each other’s side we’d always stay;
You want to leave and my heart wrings
With the pain of one with broken wings.

Please say something to ease my pain,
Could it be that I ask in vain?
The deafening silence bids me wait
To hear your words to guide my fate;
For you did vow that above all things
You’d be the wind beneath broken wings.

Please look at me as once before,
Could it be just once more?
Your eyes would surely tell me so
If I’ll be fine should I let you go
And perhaps you’ll see how my life clings
To the anguished sound of broken wings.

Please touch me once before you go,
Could it be that you do not know?
I yearn for the gentle soothing touch
To ease the pain and suffering, much
But what care you now of such things
Oh who will mend my broken wings.

But Alas I know I must let you go,
And live with memories from long ago;
Forgive me if I cease not to weep
As you rest forever in eternal sleep
Much grief and sorrow your passing brings,
As I carry your soul on broken wings.


[This message has been edited by anwaarhassan (12-25-2003 11:13 AM).]

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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1 posted 2003-12-25 12:22 PM


how sad

the format and theme are perfect, very touching...written from your heart

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2003-12-25 08:56 PM



May the Season bring to you
what could be felt as healing wings...


nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2003-12-25 09:53 PM


Please say something to ease my pain,
Could it be that I ask in vain?
The deafening silence bids me wait
To hear your words to guide my fate;
For you did vow that above all things
You’d be the wind beneath broken wings.


"Oh who will mend my broken wings..."

Your words touched the inner me...
because I have asked these same questions
the last few years, spoken the same words
although I left the wings out...

very nice

Thank you,
M

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
4 posted 2003-12-26 04:10 AM


This is a wonderful write, to which many can relate.
You touched me deeply.
Love and light. Margherita

WannabePoet
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since 2003-12-10
Posts 62
New York USA
5 posted 2003-12-27 01:32 AM


A very beautiful write. So much emotion flows through your words. We all have broken wings at one time or another, but it is at those times that we find those willing to mend them for us.
May the passion ever flow through your pen.
Tobi

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
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Forever In Your Heart
6 posted 2003-12-27 03:25 AM


someone will come along and meand those wings of yours and be the wind beneath them...then through their love...you will fly like the eagle....

~ARH

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

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