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Open Poetry #30

A Day

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

0 posted 2003-12-24 01:57 PM

Sweet dreams
Whisper
Long passions
Walks
Hills
Sweeping passion images
Calling
Windswept trees
To a torpid day
Drifting
Long grass
Sublime pleasure
Spinning wood inspired
Fragrant desire
Of peace
To a small pond milling in a lake
Fishing
For compliments
From busy ducks
Fishing
To complement
Their passion
In a day

When all else is lost
A stone, a wall and hopefully
Poetry will be written

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2003-12-24 01:59 PM

The sound of a passionate day has reached me.
Beautiful.
Love, Margherita

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

2 posted 2003-12-24 03:55 PM

I liked it!
I would suggest you change around your formatting some...don't always cap the first letter of every line...play around with dif formatting types.

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