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GG
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0 posted 2003-12-24 01:38 AM



My flesh bleeds on me,
Though I never wished that way...
It is real, but
I don't feel
Anyway.

Gripping hands
And biting lips.
Test the strength
Of fingertips.

Somehow I've become
Inhuman.
I can't feel skin-torn pain.
Though, it aches
Within my chest...
And beats unsteady
In my veins.

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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iliana
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1 posted 2003-12-24 01:50 AM


"Somehow I've become
Inhuman.
I can't feel skin-torn pain.
Though, it aches
Within my chest...
And beats unsteady
In my veins."

I would say that this is not a true statement -- you are quite human!! to be able to write so profoundly.  I think you feel great depths of emotion, personally.

GG
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Lost in thought
2 posted 2003-12-24 02:15 AM


iliana,
yea I feel emotion, lots and lots of it lol
... I've just noticed lately that my dopamine level has kicked up high, so it doesn't really hurt if I stub my toe or burn my finger.
Though more extreme pain like migraines are still there...
just feeling like some sort of beast, because everything hurts... but nothing like others do.
whew sorry, longwinded.
Thank you much for your kind reply...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

iliana
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3 posted 2003-12-24 02:20 AM


Hang in there, okay?
GG
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4 posted 2003-12-24 02:24 AM


iliana...
sorry and thank you... yes... I'll try

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
5 posted 2003-12-24 01:07 PM


Alyssa, I can't stand to see you in such pain

I'm pryaing harder.

Albert J. Allie
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 512
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6 posted 2003-12-24 08:02 PM


I like this because it's real. And means something to ME personally.
"Gripping hands
And biting lips.
Test the strength
Of fingertips."

TO ME it's like you feel like you're falling and can't seem to find anything solid to lay hold of and even if you did, you can't seem to grasp it long enough to save yourself.

You have a lot of feeling! Let it out and keep painting the pictures through your words.

AL


GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
7 posted 2003-12-28 01:53 AM


Dix,
I love you, thank you

Albert,
it doesn't matter to me if people see me writing as the same message I wrote. Just that people see it is amazing... I'm glad that this means something to you, and thanks for letting me know thank you.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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