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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2003-12-20 10:40 AM

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©2003 C.G. Ward

saw darkness in the sky tonight;
  mountains sliding down air streams,
  oceans risen-rising - falling-fallen.
          clouds, there -
      your smile slashed across it all
      like a parody of forgiveness.

stumble, tilt back.
legs weak, journey-worn.

earth,
  bent as an ostrich buried in the sand.

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     *time after time,
     the pain of tomorrow is a memory of hope.
     …but I'm not making any sense,
     not clarifying a perspective that sees only
     reds and blues and greens and -
     the occasional scarlet.

     light trapped like cymbals defeating sanctity
     with the ease of day's departure.

     see, silence can be loud,
     but love can never be held
     when your arms won't reach today.*

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I choose the heavens in which to sink my sorrows,
my sins,
and...

my feet still hold the ground in place.
wouldn't want it to fall,
carve your eyes from the skies.

so, rooted I stand.

and to think I could once see humor in the night,
when I only close my eyes to dream.

[This message has been edited by Christopher (12-20-2003 10:41 AM).]

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

1 posted 2003-12-20 10:59 AM

this is absolutely breath-taking, so
very beautiful...I love the imagery you
have created, so crystal clear!

Happy Holidays,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

2 posted 2003-12-20 11:01 AM

" *time after time,
     the pain of tomorrow is a memory of hope.
     …but I'm not making any sense,
     not clarifying a perspective that sees only
     reds and blues and greens and -
     the occasional scarlet.

     light trapped like cymbals defeating sanctity
     with the ease of day's departure.

     see, silence can be loud,
     but love can never be held
     when your arms won't reach today.*"

Morning C...Nice to read you with my coffee this morning, though it'll take a few more cups to fully appreciate this one.
(Yanno, I was thinkin' about your mouse dude from last year.  Think he might be just the bit of festivity we need this cold season.)
Hope you have a good holiday and stuff...

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2003-12-20 11:13 AM

ee, silence can be loud,
     but love can never be held
     when your arms won't reach today''''

Sigh~ how I can relate this to life.....
~~
my feet still hold the ground in place.
wouldn't want it to fall,
carve your eyes from the skies.

so, rooted I stand.

and to think I could once see humor in the night,
when I only close my eyes to dream.
~~
and this is just stunning, finding many reasons and different emotions from each read....

but solid:

"rooted I stand"

yes...almost a determined way and meaning for the poem in whole....

"carve your eyes from the skies"
thats deep and much appreciated   and the images gathered...wow
~~
as always your words are amazing

Happy Holidays....hugssss

Lauren~

~~**~~**~~**~~**~~
May the miracle of
Christmas touch your
life with special blessing

H A P P Y H O L I D A Y S

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-12-20 11:14 AM

Christopher, this is a very interesting
poem. I liked the way you seemed to
write a poem within a poem. Very
excellent writing.

Hugs and Happy Holidays,
Ethel

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

5 posted 2003-12-20 12:19 PM

One above to never mix with the other below, as the seas abhor the shore. Very well written, Chris.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2003-12-20 12:23 PM

choose the heavens in which to sink my sorrows,
my sins,
and...

my feet still hold the ground in place.
wouldn't want it to fall,
carve your eyes from the skies.

so, rooted I stand.

and to think I could once see humor in the night,
when I only close my eyes to dream.

---trying to type silence again. This is one of those verses that shuts me the hell up.

grin.

I know that makes ya happy too.

Happy Holidays, C.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-12-20 01:22 PM

Gawd Chris...
It's SO good to read you again.
This is incredible.
Happy Holidays~

~Let peace begin with me...

zenny
Member

since 2002-11-24

Posts 371
Belgium

8 posted 2003-12-20 01:46 PM

Stunning write, dear poet

Your words kept pulling my eyes further and further and left me without a breath.

Hugs, kelly

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2003-12-20 01:49 PM

ouch...this one hurts.

Yes, silence can be so loud.

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

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Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

10 posted 2003-12-23 07:47 PM

more on this later - just wanted to say thank you.

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