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iliana
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0 posted 2003-12-20 12:36 PM


The continuing renderings about Weobaei, a word who morphs into different people or creations --


Weobaei wove a basket in the Garden of the Reeds beside the River.
She chose the ones whose time was spent and cut them tenderly.
Gathering them up in a shouldered cloth,
she scurried to her favorite tree.
There she sat and wove a cradle, a sure strong vessel of sanctity.

The River only flowed one way and the sun did not shine much that day.
The male child would die because of the throne.
So Weobaei placed him there alone
in the vessel she had woven.
She set the child afloat.
She wept as she watched him through tall reeds.
She wept, and she hoped
as the River ran free.  

Iliana

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SharaRose
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1 posted 2003-12-20 12:59 PM


How she must have feared he would be harmed, but she felt he was escaping an even bigger threat....what a heartache for a mother.
Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

Sadelite
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2 posted 2003-12-20 01:26 AM


iliana,
   This has to be one of my favorites.
It is so pure.
                        Sadelite

iliana
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3 posted 2003-12-20 01:35 AM


SharaRose, thanks for your post.  Happy holiday!
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4 posted 2003-12-20 04:52 AM


iliana
In this poem Weobaei seems to morph into the mother of Moses...I like the way this poem unfolds, the language and image of the tangibles of the scene, and the stirring of invisible emotions....enjoyed
______ice
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5 posted 2003-12-20 09:50 AM


What a creative beautiful presentation!
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6 posted 2003-12-20 09:57 AM


I think you're onto something here... it'll be interesting to see where you take it!

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7 posted 2003-12-20 10:00 AM


iliana
Interesting write, enjoyed the read.

iliana
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8 posted 2003-12-20 02:24 PM


Ice - you are correct.  That is the story behind this.  I wrote this poem when my daughter went to college -- you know "empty nest sydrome outlet."  Thanks for your comments.

Sadie -- read my comment to ice; you will understand completely, then again, you are going through the same so maybe you already do.

Midnitesun -- why thank you dear one.  Thanks for reading it.

Ratleader -- yes, maybe.  Weobai, as you read earlier, was the bird song.  I have a couple of others and have concepts for more.  I'll post them as time goes on.  Thanks for following.

Sey, as always, gracious!

[This message has been edited by iliana (12-20-2003 02:26 PM).]

passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-12-21 03:47 AM


mind if I follow too?

This is really cool stuff!

iliana
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10 posted 2003-12-21 08:37 AM


Passing Shadows -- thanks.  I'll post another in a few days about Weobaei.  Take care.  
JamesMichael
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11 posted 2003-12-24 07:13 PM


Enjoyed reading this...James
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12 posted 2003-12-25 06:22 PM


Within the mystery of a name rests a poetess
capable of weaving such wondrous creations
for us to ponder and think about.

Thanx,  I too thought of Moses,  but I
understand the nest issue well.

Margherita
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13 posted 2003-12-25 06:37 PM


The flow of life ... always ahead into the unknown...
Fascinating write.
Love, Margherita

Steve Motuel
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14 posted 2003-12-25 06:40 PM


a great poem, and I loved the connection to Moses!

Steve

iliana
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15 posted 2003-12-26 02:38 AM


JamesMichael -- Thanks so much!

Magnus -- What a nice thing to say about a name.  Yes, it is difficult letting go, isn't it.  Thank you for reading the piece.  Hope to have a few more coming.  lol

iliana
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16 posted 2003-12-26 02:40 AM


Margherita -- the river --- someone should do a poem about "the river" and all the different things it can mean -- that would be a good topic.  ANYONE READING THIS, I CHALLENGE YOU TO A WRITE ABOUT "THE RIVER."  
Thanks, Margherita, for your very kind words.

iliana
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17 posted 2003-12-26 02:42 AM


THANKS BUNCHES!  Take care.........jo
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18 posted 2004-04-09 11:05 AM


I just had to check the series out again!
You're such a deep thinker and wonderful poetess.  

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