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iliana
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0 posted 2003-12-19 03:46 AM



I've heard the birds talking among themselves.
One chattered incessantly
As the other turned a deaf ear.
The dissertation annoyed him,
So he flew away.
The winged orator followed without delay.
She insisted he listen -- He said, "No way!"

She persisted --
Following him from branch to branch
Up and down through green Summer growth
through Autumn's changes fallen to Earth,
Reminding him the time was short --
Proclaiming the event --
Things to Come.  Apocalypic renderings.
"Winter's on its way," she squawked.
"I'm trying to sleep," he balked.

Then I heard her squawking morph,
Taking a more melodious form,
"Weobaei, Weobaei, Weobaei," she sang.
"Now the Gates of Heaven have opened again
To pour out on us the Golden Rain."
The sleeper felt a drop  
But he ruffled his feathers
And shook it off.

Her pursuit went on for light years
Until at last he spoke,
"Go away!" he said, "you wake me up!"
She offered up, "Weeeeoooooobaei."
Stillness filled the air.
Hours passed, he said nothing.
And she flew away.  

Iliana

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-12-19 06:55 AM



Jo, I would be very interested
in knowing what the inspiration was
behind this piece.  I found it to be
a good read!

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2 posted 2003-12-19 09:55 AM


I really enjoyed this iliana. I have often wondered what all that chirping and chattering has been about. hugs, Chris

"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet."
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3 posted 2003-12-19 10:50 AM


very much enjoyed....
Sadelite
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4 posted 2003-12-19 11:25 AM


   Is Weobaei Indonesian?

   Birds are a little like people, aren't they?    
                      Sadelite

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5 posted 2003-12-19 12:06 PM


Very interesting and well done poem - enjoyed it very much - Paul
iliana
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6 posted 2003-12-19 12:16 PM


Sunshine -- what can I say about the inspiration....hummmm.....well, I guess it was a spiritual experience.  I really did see these birds carrying on like this...and it was if I could hear them talk...it was mystical!  Thanks for your query and for taking the time to read my rendering.
iliana
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7 posted 2003-12-19 12:18 PM


Chris -- thanks.  I'm sure they talk about other things, too!  I think birds are messengers.
iliana
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8 posted 2003-12-19 12:19 PM


Lee J -- thank you for reading -- did you find yourself "listening?"  BEEEEE well.
iliana
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9 posted 2003-12-19 12:23 PM


Sadelite, nope, Weobai is not an Indonesian word.  It is what I would call a "received" word.  I've written various things about Weobai, maybe I will post some more at some time.  Weobai takes me to different places -- maybe it's an angel; maybe its meaning is a person, a woman or a man; maybe its its the ocean; maybe its the land -- but in this case, Weobai is the heralding song of a bird.  Thanks for your interest!
iliana
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10 posted 2003-12-19 12:24 PM


Paul, mornin' to you.  Thanks for stopping by and for your remark.  
Dark Angel
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11 posted 2003-12-19 04:23 PM


Hi...I too would be very interested in knowing what the inspiration was

Enjoyed.

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


iliana
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12 posted 2003-12-19 05:38 PM


Dark Angel, thanks for checking it out.  Take a look at my response to Sunshine, above.  That's as close an answer as I can give.  ..........BEEEEEwell

[This message has been edited by iliana (12-19-2003 05:39 PM).]

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13 posted 2003-12-20 03:35 PM


I like this very much... It reminds me of times when we should listen whether we want to or not. *S*
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14 posted 2003-12-20 04:12 PM


If only we each listened well to our own
little bird...might this be one's conscience
talking?  Perhaps...

Loved the poem,  the message.  Very nice...


iliana
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15 posted 2003-12-20 04:43 PM


Suthern -- thanks for your remarks -- yes, you got it.  It's a simple message -- who better to bring it than a 'little birdie.'
iliana
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16 posted 2003-12-20 04:47 PM


Magnus -- it might be -- then, again, it might be as simple as a message from a higher source -- or, it could be both if the channel is open.  In this poem, the messenger brings a word, "Weeeeoooooobaei"  I hope to weave that word, Weobaei, into a series of poems.  There is another one of my posts entitled "Weobaei" in which you'll see a short explanation.  Thanks for your interest and comments.  BEEEEEEEEwell.

[This message has been edited by iliana (12-21-2003 12:44 AM).]

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