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Ada'doLisdo'ti
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0 posted 2003-12-18 03:53 PM



Said you love somebody else, after all these years.
You expect me to walk away and not shed any tears.
How can you walk out on me after all we’ve been through.
Guess it was to much to ask, For your heart to be true.

And I…

Should have seen it coming, Should have felt the pain.
Should have seen the storm, should have felt the rain.
Should have ran for cover, when my world began to fall.
But I couldn’t have stopped from losing it all..

I watch silently as you drive away with him.
In my heart I feel the world closing in.
I try to keep from crying, the tears I cannot hold.
All I’m really hoping for is that I don’t lose control.

And I…

Should have seen it coming, Should have felt the pain.
Should have seen the storm, should have felt the rain.
Should have ran for cover, when my world began to fall.
But I couldn’t have stopped from losing it all.

The sweetest rose is one you'll die for...

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Daniel van Vliet
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1 posted 2003-12-18 04:37 PM


"The sweetest rose is one you'll die for..."

good write..

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2 posted 2003-12-18 04:42 PM


I read this almost lyrically, and then hummed this actually.  I sure see this as a song, but it was a nice write of an all too often scenario.

                    
Let there be peace on earth,
and let it begin with me.

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2003-12-18 06:29 PM


Silky...James
ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2003-12-18 06:47 PM


Quite a deep write in so few words...
A beautiful song. Well done. TD

Goodknight
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5 posted 2003-12-18 07:33 PM


a beautiful song - well written and very poignant - Paul
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