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Daniel van Vliet
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since 2001-08-31
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0 posted 2003-12-18 12:02 PM


Waiting.

My eyes, scaled over from the tears
ponder how your body sounds.
These fingers, burnt by words,
long to taste you tainted lips.

Does your voice still swirl,
envoloped by my clogged breath?
I have eloped with your burdened soul..
just waiting, till we meet again.

© Copyright 2003 Daniel van Vliet - All Rights Reserved
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
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1 posted 2003-12-18 12:05 PM


"I have eloped with your burdened soul"

What a cool line...

SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19
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Somewhere out there~
2 posted 2003-12-18 12:49 PM


Beautiful.............
Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

Daniel van Vliet
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since 2001-08-31
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3 posted 2003-12-18 04:33 PM


tk..
James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03
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Out Making Anticlines
4 posted 2003-12-18 11:02 PM


Very stark for a poem of love -- but it works well in the setting you create. Nice work.



~~J

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