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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Every room in the house is painted: emerald green Drawing pictures in windows, watching the stars, and moon fall tongues frozen: I wonder, was the cut felt? tiny pellets exposing the wounds In unlit earth never plant dreams among the soil, colors bleeding , will fall from your eyes; stones, promising the throw would never be to far in a gardens walk You can no longer look over with a view of clouds & waves and speak-- He left footprints smeared on steps; strangers in his stride I let go long before you knew- I have forgiven all your thoughts of being human My first taste- drink the sea for: everyone who has walked before me with heavy bags and bitter eyes Believe me I am screaming-- I do not keep calendars-- a part of me bent in sage and crimson skies I have learned that much Knowing words could never change feelings someone else understands-- I won’t let myself remember the center of my eyes, how you tapped each blink for your happiness draining mine I should be stronger: the second part of my life has arrived I hear the children calling - silence never fails Still it remains the guitar falling is broken & frost on windows still dampens the wings of butterflies learning to fly ~~**~~**~~**~~**~~ May the miracle of Christmas touch your life with special blessing H A P P Y H O L I D A Y S [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (12-20-2003 11:16 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you have left me utterly breathless!!!!! I am going to be reading this one again, and again....  |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
don't mind the puddle of tears..... i'll clean up my mess.... good god you've wrecked me... hugs.. s~ "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" the frost on windows still dampens the wings of butterflies learning to fly" Lady..you earned your wings a long long time ago...  Wonderful write... Luv ya! ~Let peace begin with me... |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
frosty, GE. This one left me cold from the imagery |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Every room in the house is painted: emerald green Drawing pictures in windows, watching the stars, and moon fall tongues frozen: I wonder, was the cut Felt? tiny pellets exposing the wounds =============================== colors bleeding , will fall from your eyes; stones, promising the throw would never be to far in a gardens walk You can no longer look over with a view of clouds & waves and speak-- He left footprints smeared on steps; strangers in his stride I let go long before you knew- I have forgiven all your thoughts of being human ============================ Believe me I am screaming-- I do not keep calendars-- a part of me bent in sage and crimson skies I have learned that much Knowing words could never change feelings someone else understands-- I won’t let myself remember the center of my eyes, how you tapped each blink for your happiness draining mine ===================== the frost on windows still dampens the wings of butterflies learning to fly ====================== *oh my* ......... ......... ......... there will be no words that will speak true of all this stirs in me...but then you already know...... to say this is stunningly beautiful is an understatement.......... as to your last verse.... your wings are drying dearest poetess... its all part of the healing process.  I can remember Forever December, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I should be stronger: the second part of my life has arrived I hear the children calling - silence never fails *yes* this is a great one for me to say g'nite with...thank you for this one, Lauren. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't keep calendars either  good write here Lauren, what I call "mood poetry"[This message has been edited by passing shadows (12-18-2003 05:09 AM).] |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
you have a familiar way with words, stories, in mind, Kindly, |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Greeneyes you have an amazing way with words and are able to paint wonderful pictures with them. Tony. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lauren- I have no words for this, but you know that I know.  Your ability to paint words never ceases to amaze me...this one is surely a keeper! Love you girlie. Happy Holidays, Amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
It isn't fair to say I read this poem.... I drank it, took it into me in long, thorough swallows..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! This was a powerful write indeed, Lauren. So many exquisite phrases throughout. JM captured many that captured me. Really well done ... haunting. Very much enjoyed! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
the frost on windows still dampens the wings of butterflies learning to fly God L~ you tug, you touch... you...are so you.. and we... are so blessed...  sisterIt's better than I could have planned.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, you know, my friend, that I don't get speechless very often.....but this wonderful poem has touched me so, that it has made me that way. I honestly don't know how to describe the way it's made me feel. Thank you for sharing the deep emotions you were feeling when you wrote this, sweet lady. Heart Hugs to you,  Ethel |
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Steve Motuel Member
since 2003-12-19
Posts 72Bergen auf Ruegen, Germany |
Powerful.... I sit here in awe... a really great poem, I believe you were right, I think I am going to like it here! Steve |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is so mesmerizingly beautiful and may the colors forever bring life to your heart and more colors underneath it all always beam to you, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
So expressive -- you are so good at painting! lol and Happy New Year! |
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