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Naked Wood |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Naked Wood he said I was good at endings never was there ever a truer statement the middles were the times that seemed to cause the most of the problems when the sheen of new wears off with time and I become only bare naked wood where before they had just seen who it was they wished for through their gloss it wasn’t that I had changed any they just hadn’t wanted to see me and middles to ends seem to slide down way too fast I wish someone could see me with sand paper eyes the kind that sees through to the things that really matter to a real man who knows that true beauty shows clearly in a heart recognizing styles come and go but pure quality last a lifetime that sand runs quickly through fingers but boulders have the weight of bulk knowing some arms leave you emptier than before and some you feel tightly when away a reality much sweeter than any fantasy with a tender touch being the strength to make you weak in the knees yes, I am good at endings waiting to meet my middle |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"knowing some arms leave you emptier than before and some you feel tightly when away a reality much sweeter than any fantasy" exactly excellent  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I hope you know how really good this is. I love the title...of course being male, my little mind wandered a bit... *grin* I don't want to post all my thoughts on the ideas in this, I feel somehow like I am intruding into an area that is too true and too personal. I just leave it at this is really good in more ways than one. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is really good. and I had to pop in and say merry, merry to you. and this part? "I wish someone could see me with sand paper eyes the kind that sees through... " It's amazing when that happens, h. All pretense dropped--and smile, promptly replaced with intense. Happy Holidays, lady.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
1slick_lady Excellent, I am impressed. Happy Holiday. |
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lamplighter New Member
since 2003-12-18
Posts 8Virginia, USA |
Wow... I'll be reading this again and again, I'm sure. Excellent. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
How truly profound this is! You've hit it perfectly. Those darn middles have a way of dashing all the expectations. The way you described this is pure genious. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm not good at any of it anymore... but I was there once and know exactly what you mean another fantastic bittersweet write |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"I wish someone could see me with sand paper eyes the kind that sees through to the things that really matter to a real man" Really liked this part. Very interesting write. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"knowing some arms leave you emptier than before" Ain't that the risky truth! "I wish someone could see me with sand paper eyes the kind that sees through..." Nice to find such originality. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
great poem - wow worth reading several times - paul |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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