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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-12-17 10:08 PM

Its kind of and dark insight
I'm alive and looking for purpose, direction,
something to live for

The brighter thoughts and dire happieness

I can see this ocean or a spring
A fountain of trust leaning on the rocks of judgement
Is it really water or maybe more

Deep blue neon light breaking current
Solid flow

This place I'm in has hidden and obvious truth
I can see what is so apparent now

The distant voices of melody and a stern rattling crackle
The pounding of percussion and a bass line tune

This place is so hidden and yet so apparent

In the midst of the garden and an orchard
The tree of life, tall and unseen, the center of this place
The center core of this spot on no map
Just a smudge of ink, flat and level
My surroundings are digitized and surreal
Yet I'm here and have found this denied

Direction follow the path
Cuts and wounds, bleeding me
A present and unacceptance of what has become of me

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-12-17 11:28 PM

"This place is so hidden and yet so apparent"

One of my favorite topics of ponder...I did enjoy this much, m'friend.

I am curious about some of your word choices, tho---are some missing?

and the last line particularly fueled my imagination, leading me to thoughts of personal responsibility regarding paradise.

All in all, a nice think piece, g.i.s.

Enjoyed the read.

Happy holidays.

Daniel van Vliet
Member

since 2001-08-31

Posts 80

2 posted 2003-12-18 12:03 PM

... each thought is:

"Just a smudge of ink, flat and level"

... I really enjoyed this write. well done.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2003-12-18 11:05 AM

No I didn't leave anything out. It's all there. My thoughts just get scattered everynow and then. Thanx.

THanx for reading.

GIS

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

4 posted 2003-12-19 02:34 PM

thought provoking write - enjoyed your scattering - Paul

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2003-12-20 01:59 AM

Thanx for taking the time to read it. I'm glad you appreciated it Paul.

GIS

Application of knowledge is the basis of ability.

[If I can't have everything well then just give me a taste.]-Trent Reznor

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

6 posted 2003-12-23 12:24 PM

there you are Craig...i found you...this is a beautiful write, goes with the name very well,

anyways, groovy dayz, & ttyl.

- Bonnie Sue

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2003-12-23 09:30 PM

wow. thanx. I never expected anybody to look for my work. Then respond to it so kindly. thank you.

GIS

Application of knowledge is the basis of ability.

[If I can't have everything well then just give me a taste.]-Trent Reznor

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