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iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

0 posted 2003-12-17 05:32 PM

I only have this song to sing,
     a song which can't be heard.
I would sing you everthing,
     but my song, it has no words.

Back over all the years,
     I know it wasn't real.
but of all the strangers that I touched,
     your touch I seemed to feel.

This mood will pass; the pain will end;
     the tide will roll back down.
And you will drift back fathons deep.
     I will come around.

For now I have this song to sing,
     but no one hears the words.
I don't pretend to know them
     I never really learned.

Empty tunes -- no solice,
     I take refuge with this pen.
At least I surface something. . .
     It's said that it did end.

It's sad remembering then.

Iliana

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2003-12-17 05:43 PM

Very nice rhythm to your words, Jo. I enjoyed them...rolls right off the tongue.

M

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2003-12-17 05:48 PM

M -- thanks for your comment. When I wrote this one, I really was drowning in a sea of tears; I'm just fine now. You never forget a great love, right?

[This message has been edited by iliana (12-17-2003 08:45 PM).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2003-12-17 06:41 PM

this is soft and tender, and sooo soo sad....well done...

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

4 posted 2003-12-17 06:45 PM

iliana,
I reallllly liked this. It flows so nicely.
Sadie

SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

5 posted 2003-12-17 06:54 PM

Very nice...

Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

Goodknight
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Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

6 posted 2003-12-17 08:37 PM

very nice but sad -you write of emotion with powerful images - paul

iliana
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Posts 13434
USA

7 posted 2003-12-17 08:57 PM

Sea, Sadie, Terri & Paul, thanks for your comments. Yes, 'twas a very sad time in my life, but now long past. BEEEEEEE well.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2003-12-17 10:13 PM

Nice to know this is "past history"...

Love the flow of the words within the lines.
Smooth...

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

9 posted 2003-12-17 10:15 PM

Hello Jo

I absolutely loved this and your words really touched my heart. Thank you for sharing your immense talent with us here.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

10 posted 2003-12-17 11:37 PM

nice flow...enjoyed the read

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

11 posted 2003-12-17 11:46 PM

I agree, I love the flow to this...and the sadness. You've helped me feel things I need to feel in order to move on, and there is much comfort in that. ~K~

iliana
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Posts 13434
USA

12 posted 2003-12-18 12:30 PM

Magnus -- thanks for your sweet words.

iliana
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USA

13 posted 2003-12-18 12:32 PM

Sue, you are too kind! Glad you read it. Take care.....jo

[This message has been edited by iliana (12-18-2003 12:36 AM).]

iliana
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USA

14 posted 2003-12-18 12:33 PM

ecrivan -- glad you stopped by, and thank you for your feedback.

iliana
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USA

15 posted 2003-12-18 12:36 PM

Kahlil -- how wonderful your comment made me feel. I hope you can move on -- there is always more love if we are open to it, but this you know.

[This message has been edited by iliana (12-18-2003 12:40 AM).]

Ratleader

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16 posted 2003-12-18 11:22 PM

This, I think.....
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Yes, definitely that.

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iliana
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17 posted 2003-12-19 03:51 AM

Ratleader -- Thanks for posting -- always enjoy your comments (as well as your writing).

suthern

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Louisiana

18 posted 2003-12-19 02:53 PM

I like this very much... and RL's link made the circle complete. *S*

KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow

19 posted 2003-12-19 03:06 PM

Enjoyed muchly!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

20 posted 2003-12-19 05:59 PM

Suthern --- yes, RL's link was a perfect ending! Thanks for stopping in.

Koko -- thanks for your comments, friend.

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