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Killing Time
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Killing Time |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Oh heart breaker how do you skip so many beats and change the rhythm of love lost and found without keeping. Where has the time gone and when did it stop striking the hour twelve chimes as the second hand sweeps half past a life time tracking the tears that I've wasted. How well you conceal the sun on your face that dials your name in the shadows alarmed by the sound of silence set to go off in the wake. For a time you let on too late for the day flicking your wrist without passing a glance at the clock that you race repeating the breaks. Killing time in your haste going nowhere. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
as the second hand sweeps half past a life time tracking the tears that I've wasted. love the expressions you use... I am half past my lifetime and wonder some times if I can withstand the rest hugs M |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Boy oh boy did I do that today -- and ended up asking the same questions! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Feels all too familiar. Beautifully expressed. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori, damn...when you write, you REALLY write! this was so beautifully expressed with a hint of sadness too...rarely is I find a poet who time after time continues to both amaze and inspire me, but you surely do! Happy holidays to you sweet lady, Amy  "love is like a butterfly-- |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
just pondering this lately myself, just cant seem to master this thing called time, can we? good thought girlie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh heart breaker how do you skip so many beats and change the rhythm of love lost and found without keeping. Where has the time gone and when did it stop striking the hour twelve chimes as the second hand sweeps half past a life time tracking the tears that I've wasted. ======================================= very very cool poem poetess Lori!! love the way you word played on the theme with your metaphors and personifis... that opening verse is perfect!! Well done  I can remember Forever December, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"as the second hand sweeps half past a life time tracking the tears that I've wasted." Wonderful write Lori! Happy Holidays~ Hugs, Nancy~ ~Let peace begin with me... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Well, this is a timely write! Love the word play! ~K~ |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Killing time -- temporizing in any way -- is waiting to die. Not your style, lady, not your style at all. Live. Now. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
When I read your poems outloud in my head, they are truly melodic. So good! |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very nice job. Jason |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Caught me in the very first lines. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"Where has the time gone and when did it stop striking the hour twelve chimes as the second hand sweeps half past a life time tracking the tears that I've wasted." I enjoyed reading this and the above segment was my favorite part. |
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