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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2003-12-16 03:33 PM


I feel my soul bleeding
in perfect metrical time
nobody is the wiser
for I appear this way
all the time

Somewhere Happiness
left without saying
goodbye
leaving me
to always wonder why
was it me
or was it you?

The corner of my heart
where you did once reside
now only a haven
for harlots of misery

I try to say
I love you
but I don't believe
in love anymore


Feeling just a sick drug
to kill you real slow
courtesy
of
your local Hallmark

So with nothing left say
nothing left to feel
I can only acknowledge your existance
and walk away

So I sit in the dark
counting down the hours
as my soul bleeds its final
drops
in perfect metrical
time


[This message has been edited by Brad Majors (12-16-2003 03:35 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-12-16 03:35 PM


Somewhere Happiness
left without saying
goodbye
leaving me
to always wonder why
was it me
or was it you?


ouch  Brad, geez.....do I ever know this.
very well done Brad....very well done....

Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-12-16 03:36 PM


thank you
satin water passion
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3 posted 2003-12-16 03:44 PM


The corner of my heart
where you did once reside
now only a haven
for harlots of misery

those lines punched me in the face! damn good way of putting something!

~andrew

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4 posted 2003-12-16 04:02 PM


wow, i really love this...it speaks pain and beauty....and yay for georgia :Þ

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

Brad Majors
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5 posted 2003-12-16 04:12 PM


thank you
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6 posted 2003-12-16 04:22 PM


Somewhere Happiness
left without saying
goodbye


Brad...so sad but I know the feeling.

This reads nice aloud.

*s
M

Brad Majors
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7 posted 2004-01-05 10:42 AM


thank you
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8 posted 2004-01-05 01:58 PM


I missed this and am glad it was brought back up...

Nice job Dan!

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then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
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9 posted 2004-01-05 02:09 PM


Pain and anger have a way of making us bleed..but then, without it, we could not have poetry as wonderful as this could we~

Out of pain, the soul speaks, the heart bleeds words of wisdom~ARH

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

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