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It Stretches Us
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It Stretches Us |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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Memories are funny things Like ages shown in growth rings 'Round the tree of profound truth They circle us, encapsulate youth. Tonight I ponder growing things, Living, breathing, hurting things. But somewhere like the deep tree rings, I also remember Decembering, When making taffy was the greatest fun, Pulling here and pressing thumbs, The more we pulled the tougher the share Then sweet chewy candy everywhere Waiting for the next morning to reach its ultimate goal. Tonight the memory lends new meaning To hardships of today. Pulled and stretched, then cut and cooled, hardened in that way, Love stretches us, it makes us grow, can chew us up for evermore. Oh Love, great love, soul’s taffy pull. Stretching us until we’re whole Or ‘til we break apart at last, stretching us to a point of grace Pleasing its appetite with the flavor. [This message has been edited by iliana (12-16-2003 02:39 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Iliana, I am really enjoying your poetry. Your metaphors are great, and you have a very readable style. Welcome to Passions. I look forward to more from your pen. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Midnitesun, thank you so much for the comment; I'm really glad you are enjoying it. Best to you! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Tonight the memory lends new meaning To hardships of today. Pulled and stretched, then cut and cooled, hardened in that way, Love stretches us, it makes us grow, can chew us up for evermore That's so good!!! Life is ever changing and taking on new meanings, as we grow. You write so nice, and I am so glad you're here, iliana~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
neat poem. "Stretching us until we’re whole Or ‘til we break apart at last, stretching us to a point of grace" Great line! Powerful! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Iliana~ Such a lovely read~ Welcome to Passions ... and Happy Holidays~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Iilana, this is such a beautiful heartfelt write...I loved the analogies you used in this...great flow too! Happy Holidays, Amy  "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, I liked this one a lot. It reminds me of taffy pulls-I wonder if people still do that! Great analogy made between people's hurt and taffy: the more you stretch that taffy, the tougher it seems to get for a while, but ultimately the treat is worth it. Tonight I ponder growing things, Living, breathing, hurting things. But somewhere like the deep tree rings, I also remember Decembering, When making taffy was the greatest fun, Pulling here and pressing thumbs, The more we pulled the tougher the share Then sweet chewy candy everywhere |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Your choice of imagery here is exquisite! You done good, rookie! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very nicely penned...and much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Let peace begin with me... |
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