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Kazeru
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since 2003-12-16
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0 posted 2003-12-22 12:38 PM



Mommy, who is that man?
Who walks through the rain alone
Never seeking shelter

Mommy, who is that man?
Who sits there in the diner
Always looking at a picture

Mommy, who is that man?
So full of regrets against life
That he chooses to be alone

Mommy, who is that man?
Staring back at me when
I gaze into the mirror...

->Be thy angels? Nay We are just men!<-

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iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
1 posted 2003-12-22 01:03 AM


Karezu -- innocent questions of a child can cause much pain sometimes. Also, a child is usually the one to embarrass the one he loves the most.  Sometimes it would be easier if they didn't ask questions, huh?
Kazeru
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since 2003-12-16
Posts 31

2 posted 2003-12-22 01:05 AM


actually I tried to convey the lost innoncence of someone whose broken heart hast triumphed but indeed children do ask questions you would not dare ask, and yet it is this simple innocence that makes children so great

->Be thy angels? Nay We are just men!<-

serenities_blood
Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56
New Zealand
3 posted 2003-12-22 01:23 AM


it is very innocent and portrays that we all have questions about ourselves and we are all curious of the way we act sometimes

xoxLORxox

Daniel van Vliet
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since 2001-08-31
Posts 80

4 posted 2003-12-22 05:17 PM


..... this is great write, you have developed this person (self) so well.... wd.
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2003-12-22 08:48 PM


Powerful write, Kazeru.  

"When your life is tossed and turning
And you are on the raging sea I'll come and pull you from the water Then you will know that you are free" - MWS

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