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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-12-15 10:28 AM

Beneath the Surface

Somewhere beyond here, death is waiting,
as I try to starve its appearance
remaining speechless, allowing the thoughts
to travel as far as my clenched lips
that prevent the cold's chapping
from tearful words.

Beneath the surface I have been brushed
by a warmth, an invitation not met,
caught up in cliches of another world
where Winter has come and settled in.
Its wall of distortion standing before me,
blocking me, ending it
before it ever had a chance to begin.

I let the shadows whisper to me,
their pretense guiding me to that place
where spirits come alive and feelings are reborn.
I live in the house that dreams built,
random thoughts beneath the surface...
waiting for the gift of you.

M
"beneath the surface" inspired by LP

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-12-15 10:44 AM

well done !

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

2 posted 2003-12-15 11:32 AM

Woohoo naked one. Love this. Darn you did well. Wonderful piece here my friend. Enjoyed it so very much but...pssst...I am kind of jealous I did not write it! (Wink!) Seriously...well done.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2003-12-15 11:40 AM

extraordinary write...very much enjoyed!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-12-15 12:40 PM

well now this...this I like! Finally! a poem where the shadows are good!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2003-12-15 01:39 PM

Very nice Maureen. hugs, Chris

"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet."
-Plato

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2003-12-15 05:36 PM

LIke this...james

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

7 posted 2003-12-15 07:10 PM

great poetry - you say so much so well - loved it - Paul

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2003-12-15 07:11 PM

nice write

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

9 posted 2003-12-15 07:29 PM

nakdthoughts,

that prevent the cold's chapping
from tearful words.

a real visual... Enjoyed the write.
sadelite

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2003-12-16 12:52 PM

Maureen, I can hear your heart pounding
so many miles away~

Please know I will always be here for you,
if you needed me.

Love you, M~

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