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Open Poetry #30

they told me not to smile

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

0 posted 2003-12-14 08:45 PM

we were standing there freezing
and i was the only one smiling
they told me not to smile
but i loved them so
and i was a part of something
better than me by far
bigger than me too
but still, a part of me
we were parts for each other
and it gave me
people who told me not to smile
but the second the flash went off
they all laughed
and hugged each other
like they were smiling too
it slipped out
we all felt it
the camera caught me happy
the only time it has ever captured
the real me
was when i wasn't supposed
to smile

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

Estel
Junior Member

since 2003-12-10

Posts 22

1 posted 2003-12-14 09:00 PM

I like this poem a lot, it speaks of depths beneath the surface.

One thing that caught me up was the total lack of punctuation, but meybe that's just part of your style.

Great poem!

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