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SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

0 posted 2003-12-13 07:20 PM



It started with sleet
Then finished off with snow
Leaving the ground white



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1 posted 2003-12-13 07:24 PM


enjoyed this
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2 posted 2003-12-13 09:03 PM


Hi Sue  
I love this. I wish I could
see some snow.
Hugs
Ethel

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3 posted 2003-12-13 09:47 PM


send some down my way, ey?
Alicat
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4 posted 2003-12-13 09:57 PM


It's almost a traditional formatted haiku. The second line is short one syllable.

Three lines haikus have.
Counting off each syllable:
Five, seven and five.

It was also very close to a senryu, which is a haiku (normally) with naturalistic imagery tied to a deeper truth.

Snow sure would be something here. There's a term they use for it...lemme see here..ah yes. Myth. *grin*

Alicat

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5 posted 2003-12-14 03:15 AM


Hi Sue, and this was a great one!!  Hey, folks, after 23 years of digging my van out of the snow in Alaska, am most happy it only visits England rarely!!!  LOL!!! It is pretty though, once in a while, and especially at Christmas, eh?  Good work, Sue!!  ~S~

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Don't let it make you...

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6 posted 2003-12-14 10:56 AM


I love the way snow can cover the ugliest city streets and alleys, making them almost bearable.
Good write, Sue, and good to see you here in the blue! Happy holidays, and wishing you great riding moments!

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7 posted 2003-12-14 10:59 AM


Hi Sue!
It snowed here last night and it's SO pretty.
Hope you are well and all is going great for you.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Let peace begin with me...    

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